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I think your lemons are great... that sounds weird. Oh well. All the people you mentioned at the beginning are hot but I\'d have to switch Akito and Yuki with Hatori and Kazuma. Kyo\'s definately the hotest of them all. You should have Tohru accidentally bumped off a cliff though. If she was gone then Kyo might actually be able to fulfill his dream of nothing but sex all day long, though he\'d probably want to eat, sleep, use the bathoom and shower though he could still fuck in the shower. He\'d definately want to sleep though, all that fucking would wear him out.

try using toys or and egg vibrater (it goes in his ass) and i dont even know who that guy is...dont use him...just go with a major shigure, hatori, and possibly ayame....and haru *sighs* got to love him...

Yay!!! update. I don\'t think the lemon was as bad as you think. I don\'t know how you could get kureno in this unless they had to go to the main house or something. But if you can\'t get kureno maybe you could try using Ritsu instead. update soon!

I don\'t think that last lemon was all that bad. Though it probably would have been better if it was a threesome with Haru. Anyway, I don\'t think you should do a pairing with Kureno, I wanna read about Kyo with Aya. Or maybe with both \'Gure and Aya. The more the merrier I say. Love what ya doin\' so please keep it up. Can\'t wait to read more.

I really like that you put Hatori with Kyo ^_^ (there needs to be more of this pairing)
after ch 5 you asked for suggestions regarding the repetitive lemon scenes-- i always struggle with finding a good lemon (since i\'ve read so many yaoi fics)-- i finally found one in the \"King Arthur\" movie category called \"Shattered Ice\"- take a quick peek at that if you need to (the first chapter really got me excited, i think it\'s because the author made the sex scene more slower and painful by describing every intimate gesture (without telling the readers plainly what was going on)-- So instead of saying that \"_________ took Kyo\'s cock into his mouth\", you can say that \"___________ ran his fingers softly around the length, while gently caressing Kyo\'s inner thighs. However, behind the sweet words and touches, there was a possessive lust in ___________. He wanted desired longed dreamt wished for Kyo. A tongue darted out teasingly, only when prompted by Kyo\'s reluctant moans.\" blah blah blah and more poetic stuff like that. a good way to excite the readers is to try to tell how much the two men/boys need each other, don\'t be afraid to break certain grammar rules to do this. I hope I helped you out (my advice wasn\'t very clear, though ^^;;;;)

Dude this is sooo cool . Kyo\'s gonna be with like 4 guys by the time this is over!!! The handcuffs were a great idea by the way! update asap.

Ha ha! Busted!!!

But hopefully Hatori and Kyo will use Haru\'s discovery to they\'re advantage.^^ Oh yes, you\'re welcome. I just love that Kyouke site, and the mistress Crystal even more for putting it up. Anyway, far be it from me not to restrain kyo uke access to other Kyo uke fans.^__^ Nice chapter by the way, I\'m reading the next one as soon as possible.

-BakaDen.Out.^_^

Yay! Handcuffy, Handcuffs *sing*
I liked that part veeeery much! ^_^

Are we going to get some Yuki-Action soon??? *makespuppyeyes* Please!

hmmmm haru and kyo on the roof could be fun.....

Oh yea!! You\'ve got to let Haru get a little taste of Kyo. Or better yet, you could do a Haru, Kyo, and \'Tori sandwich, with Kyo receiving at his beginning and end! You could have Yuki come home early and catch them all in the act. I\'ve enjoyed what I\'ve been reading and I am awaiting even more juicy chapters to come!