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August 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
...*Falls out of chair* The ending! Why didn't I see it coming? D: (...No pun intended, mind).
Lovely, I must say :D
Lovely, I must say :D
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August 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
...WOW
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September 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOW.
Searching for words, finding myself speechless, here... (Of course, intellegent analysis is a little difficult when you\'re reduced to squirming in your chair...) Really, WOW. Excellent use of third person, here - as personal and intimate as any first person narrative I\'ve ever read. Extremely, disturbingly erotic. I wouldn\'t have thought of Ginji as having these thoughts, but the way you\'ve presented it had me entirely convinced. And entirely turned on.
Also, something occurs to me. Recently, I was skimming through a writing excersize book. One of the excersizes was to write a \"un-reliable\" third person narrative, where the \"truth\" being described was not the actual truth, and then have the actual truth revealed. I couldn\'t think of how you\'d write a narrative in third person that told a lie, at least, not and have any good reason for it. ...Well, I guess this would be a prime example here. xD
Searching for words, finding myself speechless, here... (Of course, intellegent analysis is a little difficult when you\'re reduced to squirming in your chair...) Really, WOW. Excellent use of third person, here - as personal and intimate as any first person narrative I\'ve ever read. Extremely, disturbingly erotic. I wouldn\'t have thought of Ginji as having these thoughts, but the way you\'ve presented it had me entirely convinced. And entirely turned on.
Also, something occurs to me. Recently, I was skimming through a writing excersize book. One of the excersizes was to write a \"un-reliable\" third person narrative, where the \"truth\" being described was not the actual truth, and then have the actual truth revealed. I couldn\'t think of how you\'d write a narrative in third person that told a lie, at least, not and have any good reason for it. ...Well, I guess this would be a prime example here. xD
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September 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hi!! i found your fic through a lj get backers community. i\'ve recently become a fan of the show, so i\'ve been searching for good fics. yours was certainly interesting, and it was so hot XD it would be awesome if you wrote some more XP
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July 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*Falls from seat and dies*
You made this soul happy. So happy... :D
You made this soul happy. So happy... :D
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June 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well.. that was hot.. confusing.. and even sad at the same time.... O.o
But I like it! Hope to read more GB fics from you, if they are anything like this one! :p
But I like it! Hope to read more GB fics from you, if they are anything like this one! :p
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June 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WHEW!! *clears throat* been a while since I\'ve read anythin that good in one sitting! I love a good ban X ginji. and the added extra of akabane was great! ^_^ i hope to see more like this one in the near future! Nice Work!
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June 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good morning! My shift just finished more than an hour ago and it seems like I\'m far from collapsing for lack of sleep...but I won\'t wait for that to happen now, eh? ;) Okay, on to the review! I\'ll make it short (with probably more blahs from me in the middle).
(1) As the author, I perceived you as somehow distant from your characters. In other words, I don\'t feel you there. I don\'t feel the emotion, and POV has nothing to do with it.
(2) The concept was nice
(3) Polish =)
(4) Great detail, but...
(5) The pattern of narration seems to repeat -- the sentence somewhere along the middle part sounded very much the same as the sentence somewhere at the beginning...and it\'noticeable! (please note that this is based on the first reading only).
(6) As of now, I can say that your great using 1st person. ;)
Email me if you have other concerns. Ja, mouto!
(1) As the author, I perceived you as somehow distant from your characters. In other words, I don\'t feel you there. I don\'t feel the emotion, and POV has nothing to do with it.
(2) The concept was nice
(3) Polish =)
(4) Great detail, but...
(5) The pattern of narration seems to repeat -- the sentence somewhere along the middle part sounded very much the same as the sentence somewhere at the beginning...and it\'noticeable! (please note that this is based on the first reading only).
(6) As of now, I can say that your great using 1st person. ;)
Email me if you have other concerns. Ja, mouto!
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June 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMG -dies via awesomeness of this story- I...just...OMG. ^^ -speachless-