rate_review Reviews

That's a pretty interesting concept. However... the way you're writing it... it's not very exciting. I mean, mages??!! What, in the future people are fighting with swords and magic? I don't see any detail on how the war is being fought. You gotta know something about the military before you write a military drama!

Still, things are going fine. You should add a little more detail, and I do feel you should something about the whole... "mages" thing. Seriously.

God bless ya,
The Black Shirt

P.S: maybe I can help? I can do Daisuke's POV (point of view). By the way, what does Riku do?

I love it! ^_^ Update soon!

People are so mean! Come on, you read this really good fic; a simple \'good\' would be nice. Or even if you didn\'t like it, you could at least say why. It\'s only going to be three chapters long; the least you can do is tell the author how they\'re doing. Well, \'I\' like your fic, and I can\'t wait for another chapter. Until then, I\'ll just be mad on your behalf. *Hmph*

BTW, I like reading a pairing that\'s not Daisuke/Dark or Daisuke/Satoshi. For some reason, Yu-Gi-Oh ruined me for the literal \'live-in-lover\' thing, and...I don\'t know, something about Satoshi creeps me out. I like Riku (I think she\'s the strongest of the twins, and she complements Dai nicely). You\'re a little ooc, but it\'s an AU, right, so that\'s okay. I like the fact that even though you kept Mio *shudder* you kept her in character, and I\'m intrigued by the mystery voice in Riku\'s head. No major spelling or grammar mistakes; you obviously took your time and worked on this. Good job!