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Okay Okay I\'m writin heh I started writing yesterday needs ta be longer though and I was babysitting my neices for my mother and it took us over 3 hours to get home for a stupid accident that happened in the morning traffic sucks and I still live with my parents and its my mothers computer and *sniff* I only have a few minutes on puter tonight but I\'ll be on it all day tomarrow Hopefully I don\'t get stuck on the story again heh well byebyes

I like this idea! I hope you go on with the story soon!

How a person can give an opinion on such a short not really descriptive story is beyond me. Please continue and lets see what Yuki does to get back at Shuichi. *cough* Yaoi!!!

werrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrfc sweewwwwwwwwwwwww

This is okay but the chapter is rather short, ne?

Please write more! I think you should keep writting cause i want to know what happens!Maybe it will get better when the chapters progress! So
don\'t give up! YEAH! :)

to give a review saying a story or plot is bad when you\'ve only read the first chapter is pretty childish in my opinion, but to each his own, i guess. anyways, i thought it would a interesting idea if you play out right so don\'t give up so readily. if you like this story then continue to write it. afterall, why let a couple of bad reviews stop you? have fun! (^_^)

Usually don\'t say much, but got to agree with Banana Fingers, but I still have different points. Age thing wouldn\'t really matter, however this story has many holes. Not Pirates of the Caribbean holes, but more like cheesey holes. A little bit of description to the scenes, the more explanation to why it’s going on and for what reason Eiri would actually go in the first place in order.

Really, I don’t think any type of eyes or blowjob could ever get Eiri to do something as stupid as reality TV.

Perhaps a more genuine idea, more realistic on Eiri’s behalf, is in order. If you can come up with a better plot bunny than this, maybe people can give you more credit that you wish.

Araki

please continue sounds intresting

sorry to tell you this, but the idea isn\'t the brightest. I mean, who signs someone up for a reality show just because? Why would Yuki agree to go? He wouldn\'t! I\'m aware that this is fiction, and that it\'s your story, and therefore you can do what you please with it, but you must know that when you decide to post a bad story, you\'re gonna get flamed.
I don\'t want to assume too much, but I think you\'re not even old enough to be reading R rated stories, because honestly I don\'t know how can you consider this a good idea. It\'s a plotline that would be enjoyed by a thirteen year-old fangirl, and believe me, that\'s not good.