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September 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I\'ve got some time so I\'m reviewing! I just wish I could somehow also get other people to review your story cause I know you like to hear something back from your readers. Unfortunately that is out of my hands so I hope you\'ll already be pleased with this review.
Poor Kai! What are you doing to her? I thought that Hiro would have only grabbed Ran but I guess that I was wrong. This how ever does make Ken all the more pissed off so if I was Hiro (and luckily I\'m not) I would watch my back.
But Kai really has some strange friends, LOL. Nah just kidding. I wouldn\'t expect anything else from Kai then to have at least one friend who dealt in weapons. But why do they always have to own these small shops? In almost all the stories it are always the small store owners who are the ones you seek. So a word of advice: \"If you ever are searching for a particular shop owner, just start with the small shops first!\". I guess we should count ourself lucky that you didn\'t put the shop in some kind of dark alley cause that is also always very popular. Oh and what extra did the shop owner give to Shion????
Hiro really loves Ran. Kicking Ran, raping Ran, torturing Ran. It must be real love!!! He is just a real sick puppy (Ah no, now I\'m insulting puppies!). Hiro is just a real sicko (yeah, that\'s better)! Especially since he still climbs in the bed to cuddle with Ran after all that he does to Ran. Does he really think that Ran likes that? Hello Hiro??? Is there some one home upstairs????
But how creepy to make Kai look just like Shion\'s dead wife!! It makes you wonder if he loves Kai for who she really is or because she looks like his dead wife. And why didn\'t Ran react strangely when he first met Kai? He must have seen immediately the ressembalance, no?
And I was right!!! Shion did sent those vampire hunters after Hiro but I never thought that the reason why would be so awful. Does Shion even know why Hiro did it? Does Shion know that Hiro did it cause Ran hated Shion\'s wife? If not then this can cause some hassles if he finds out. (And if Kai discovers that she looks exactly like Shion\'s dead wife then this can also create some dust.)
Why the hell isn\'t Ran calling out to Ken using the thelapy of their link? That way Hiro would at least haven\'t known that Ran was calling out to his lover. And why does Hiro call Ken a human? Doesn\'t he know that Ran changed him?
I have to say that Ken and Shion are sure taking their sweet time to get to Hiro\'s mansion. Three days to get there??? Is Hiro\'s mansion on the other side of the world or what??? What the hell kept them?
And it must also have been hard on Ken and Shion. Ran and Kai had to undergo all the torture but Ken and Shion just felt it all through their link and they could do nothing at that time for their loved ones. It must have really frustrated them during their search.
Luckily for Ran that Ken\'s cross is protecting him a little and it is great that Hiro can\'t remove it (Gillie sticks her tongue out towards Hiro)! But why didn\'t he force Ran then to remove the cross? He could have used Kai as blackmail.
What is this smell that Ran also smelled when Ken rescued him? Is this perhaps the smell that vampires emit when they are losing themselves to the darker side? I\'m just thinking about this cause Ken was driven so much by his anger during the rescue that it maybe brought him on the brink of the dark side. Hell maybe this is even Hiro\'s plan. How do vampires become evil anyway?
Ah you are inserting Ken\'s family. I love it! I just hope that it won\'t get them in trouble.
Waiting for your next chapter, more Hiro evilness and some sweet comforting of Ran by Ken and of Kai by Shion!
Kisses and hugs
Gillie
Poor Kai! What are you doing to her? I thought that Hiro would have only grabbed Ran but I guess that I was wrong. This how ever does make Ken all the more pissed off so if I was Hiro (and luckily I\'m not) I would watch my back.
But Kai really has some strange friends, LOL. Nah just kidding. I wouldn\'t expect anything else from Kai then to have at least one friend who dealt in weapons. But why do they always have to own these small shops? In almost all the stories it are always the small store owners who are the ones you seek. So a word of advice: \"If you ever are searching for a particular shop owner, just start with the small shops first!\". I guess we should count ourself lucky that you didn\'t put the shop in some kind of dark alley cause that is also always very popular. Oh and what extra did the shop owner give to Shion????
Hiro really loves Ran. Kicking Ran, raping Ran, torturing Ran. It must be real love!!! He is just a real sick puppy (Ah no, now I\'m insulting puppies!). Hiro is just a real sicko (yeah, that\'s better)! Especially since he still climbs in the bed to cuddle with Ran after all that he does to Ran. Does he really think that Ran likes that? Hello Hiro??? Is there some one home upstairs????
But how creepy to make Kai look just like Shion\'s dead wife!! It makes you wonder if he loves Kai for who she really is or because she looks like his dead wife. And why didn\'t Ran react strangely when he first met Kai? He must have seen immediately the ressembalance, no?
And I was right!!! Shion did sent those vampire hunters after Hiro but I never thought that the reason why would be so awful. Does Shion even know why Hiro did it? Does Shion know that Hiro did it cause Ran hated Shion\'s wife? If not then this can cause some hassles if he finds out. (And if Kai discovers that she looks exactly like Shion\'s dead wife then this can also create some dust.)
Why the hell isn\'t Ran calling out to Ken using the thelapy of their link? That way Hiro would at least haven\'t known that Ran was calling out to his lover. And why does Hiro call Ken a human? Doesn\'t he know that Ran changed him?
I have to say that Ken and Shion are sure taking their sweet time to get to Hiro\'s mansion. Three days to get there??? Is Hiro\'s mansion on the other side of the world or what??? What the hell kept them?
And it must also have been hard on Ken and Shion. Ran and Kai had to undergo all the torture but Ken and Shion just felt it all through their link and they could do nothing at that time for their loved ones. It must have really frustrated them during their search.
Luckily for Ran that Ken\'s cross is protecting him a little and it is great that Hiro can\'t remove it (Gillie sticks her tongue out towards Hiro)! But why didn\'t he force Ran then to remove the cross? He could have used Kai as blackmail.
What is this smell that Ran also smelled when Ken rescued him? Is this perhaps the smell that vampires emit when they are losing themselves to the darker side? I\'m just thinking about this cause Ken was driven so much by his anger during the rescue that it maybe brought him on the brink of the dark side. Hell maybe this is even Hiro\'s plan. How do vampires become evil anyway?
Ah you are inserting Ken\'s family. I love it! I just hope that it won\'t get them in trouble.
Waiting for your next chapter, more Hiro evilness and some sweet comforting of Ran by Ken and of Kai by Shion!
Kisses and hugs
Gillie
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September 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Am I the only one still reviewing this story? (looks around and sees nobody else) Ah well, then let\'s just get on with it.
How could you make Ran doubt that Ken was worthy of Ran\'s ring? Damn it even Kai and Shion aren\'t that long together and Shion had already given Kai his ring. And then making Ran even think that maybe he should give the ring to Hiro, man I could just throw something at Ran for having such crazy thoughts! Didn\'t they decided last chapter that Hiroshi was dangerous and needed to be stopped? Well Ran, you don\'t do that by giving him the ring which holds a piece of your soul (whacks Ran on the head). Luckely commen sense won and he decided to give it to Ken. And even if he still would have had doubts then they most definately would be erased after Ken gave Ran the cross that had been from his parents. But I had forgotten that Ken was also a vampire and that so the cross would contain a piece of Ken\'s soul. When I read that, Ken\'s gift even became more beautiful. Nice one!
I loved the part where Ken said that he may not always like Ran but that he would always love him. It is just so nicely said and so true! When you\'re in love with some one and you\'re mad at that person you really don\'t like that person any more for the moment but this doesn\'t mean that you don\'t love him any more. And sticking to beautiful said things. The little phrase where Ken asks if their souls are touching when he lets the ring touch the cross, was so romantic! I really loved it! And so let me just say that I love your idea about those objects that hold a part of a vampire\'s soul.
Uhm what is this with their sex? Are they trying to set a new record or what, LOL. And no wonder that Ken was a little sore. Man what would you expect after having cum 16 times? I think I wouldn\'t be able to walk any more for the next few days.
I loved Hiroshi\'s part. It really made me laugh when I imagined him pacing his room and making those complaints about who would call their kid Ken, who in their right mind would ever fall in love with some one named Ken,... It was superb!
But how does he want to make Ran his? Ran is already a vampire so I guess that the biting thing isn\'t an option here. And let\'s not forget that Ran now wears Ken\'s cross which holds a part of Ken\'s soul. Maybe this will be able to protect Ran from Hiroshi on some sort of level. Oh and let\'s just hope that Hiroshi doesn\'t get his hand on Ken cause the future Hiroshi has in mind for our kitten isn\'t such a nice one.
Back to the happy couple (in bath!!!) I believe Ran is right that the happiness is a result of the two reasons he sums up but what to think of the fact that he says that he would almost give Ken to somebody else so he could watch Ken\'s face during the sex (with some one else then) cause he just loves Ken\'s face then? Should you be grateful for such a complement?
I laughed at the way Ken teased Ran in the bed. First getting Ran all rilled up and then turning and saying you\'re going to take a nap. You just go Ken! Luckely for Ran, Ken isn\'t that much of a tease and he helped Ran soon enough with his uhm little problem. And the interaction after that was just superb especially when Ran said he couldn\'t cum any more and Ken pretented to go and test that out which caused Ran to react immediately so he could prevent his kitten from ravishing him again.
Okay, if my friend and lover\'s sister would be standing in the room while I was naked, then I wouldn\'t be anoyed but embarrased to death.
And what is this suggestion of Ran that he\'ll take Ken as his dessert? Didn\'t he just say that he wouldn\'t be able to cum for a LONG time? I guess time runs differently in the Ran\'s universe, LOL.
But what the fuck happened at the end of the chapter????!!! And how can you leave the story there????!!!!! I want to know what exactly happened and I want to go and save Ran!!!!!! Damn, talk about a cliffhanger!
Hope to hear from you soon again (can\'t be soon enough). Till then,
Kisses and hugs
Gillie
How could you make Ran doubt that Ken was worthy of Ran\'s ring? Damn it even Kai and Shion aren\'t that long together and Shion had already given Kai his ring. And then making Ran even think that maybe he should give the ring to Hiro, man I could just throw something at Ran for having such crazy thoughts! Didn\'t they decided last chapter that Hiroshi was dangerous and needed to be stopped? Well Ran, you don\'t do that by giving him the ring which holds a piece of your soul (whacks Ran on the head). Luckely commen sense won and he decided to give it to Ken. And even if he still would have had doubts then they most definately would be erased after Ken gave Ran the cross that had been from his parents. But I had forgotten that Ken was also a vampire and that so the cross would contain a piece of Ken\'s soul. When I read that, Ken\'s gift even became more beautiful. Nice one!
I loved the part where Ken said that he may not always like Ran but that he would always love him. It is just so nicely said and so true! When you\'re in love with some one and you\'re mad at that person you really don\'t like that person any more for the moment but this doesn\'t mean that you don\'t love him any more. And sticking to beautiful said things. The little phrase where Ken asks if their souls are touching when he lets the ring touch the cross, was so romantic! I really loved it! And so let me just say that I love your idea about those objects that hold a part of a vampire\'s soul.
Uhm what is this with their sex? Are they trying to set a new record or what, LOL. And no wonder that Ken was a little sore. Man what would you expect after having cum 16 times? I think I wouldn\'t be able to walk any more for the next few days.
I loved Hiroshi\'s part. It really made me laugh when I imagined him pacing his room and making those complaints about who would call their kid Ken, who in their right mind would ever fall in love with some one named Ken,... It was superb!
But how does he want to make Ran his? Ran is already a vampire so I guess that the biting thing isn\'t an option here. And let\'s not forget that Ran now wears Ken\'s cross which holds a part of Ken\'s soul. Maybe this will be able to protect Ran from Hiroshi on some sort of level. Oh and let\'s just hope that Hiroshi doesn\'t get his hand on Ken cause the future Hiroshi has in mind for our kitten isn\'t such a nice one.
Back to the happy couple (in bath!!!) I believe Ran is right that the happiness is a result of the two reasons he sums up but what to think of the fact that he says that he would almost give Ken to somebody else so he could watch Ken\'s face during the sex (with some one else then) cause he just loves Ken\'s face then? Should you be grateful for such a complement?
I laughed at the way Ken teased Ran in the bed. First getting Ran all rilled up and then turning and saying you\'re going to take a nap. You just go Ken! Luckely for Ran, Ken isn\'t that much of a tease and he helped Ran soon enough with his uhm little problem. And the interaction after that was just superb especially when Ran said he couldn\'t cum any more and Ken pretented to go and test that out which caused Ran to react immediately so he could prevent his kitten from ravishing him again.
Okay, if my friend and lover\'s sister would be standing in the room while I was naked, then I wouldn\'t be anoyed but embarrased to death.
And what is this suggestion of Ran that he\'ll take Ken as his dessert? Didn\'t he just say that he wouldn\'t be able to cum for a LONG time? I guess time runs differently in the Ran\'s universe, LOL.
But what the fuck happened at the end of the chapter????!!! And how can you leave the story there????!!!!! I want to know what exactly happened and I want to go and save Ran!!!!!! Damn, talk about a cliffhanger!
Hope to hear from you soon again (can\'t be soon enough). Till then,
Kisses and hugs
Gillie
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August 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I don\'t know if you have noticed but chapter 6 is the same as chapter 5 or did you make slight changes to it (I haven(t read the whole chapter 6)?
So on to chapter 7 and 7,5. I knew that Ran wouldn\'t be able to resist to call Hiroshi. Even when he tore the card and tyhrew it away, I just kept thinking \"How long till you\'ll get the pieces back out of the trash and call your ex?\" But I guess that no one will be surprised that he did this cause the connection between Ran and Hiroshi is just too strong.
When I read that Ran immediately started kissing Hiroshi, I just went like: Okay, this is something that Ken would love to hear. \"Hey kitten, I just couldn\'t help myself, I had to go and see Hiroshi. And guess what, before we even started talking, we were kissing each other madly.\" But Ran didn\'t have to confess at all cause he got sprong (that\'s what you get when you do this in such a public place).
Well you just have to love Crawford for knowing where he has to show up and when. But what with his vision? Will the group be able to prevent it? Actually, I\'m hoping that they won\'t be able to cause I would love to see how they would get out that situation. Oh and the part where you wrote that Farfie was very absorbed in his driving or that he just was trying to decide if he should hit the nun, made me laugh. You just go Farfie!
Ken\'s reaction to Crawford\'s explanation about Ran\'s occupation for the moment, was just so typically. If you get to hear something like that, you just don\'t want to believe it at first. Unfortunately the poor desk of Ken had to suffer the consequences (I love you Crawford!) and in the end poor Kenken didn\'t really got a choice in the matter as Crawford drags him along (no you don\'t get a choice in this one Ken) to go and spy on Ran. I found it really lovely cause it just shows that Crawford cares for them (hugs Crawford).
But poor Ken. It must have really hurt to see Ran kissing his ex and then even more since it is in a public place. A place that Ran never wanted to be so passionate with you. Ken wasn\'t good enough for that, but Hiroshi is just a whole different story. (Well, I actually think that Ran looses a bit of his rational thinking when he is with Hiroshi. He also gets consumed by lust, so definitaly not healthy. But the lust that he feels for Ken is mixed with love and thus far more pure. Hiroshi only gets the lust bit.)
If I was Ken, I wouldn\'t have headed back to the office but I would have let Crawford drive me home so I could pack up some stuff and go and stay in a hotel for a while so I could think about it all (yes, I react always far too emotional!).
But why didn\'t Crawford tell Ken also about the vision he had?
Now back to the kissing couple. Let me just say eaw! Why continue kissing if he tasts rotten? And what is this whole declaration about Ken being the only one for Ran? The kissing really did prove that! I can understand that Hiroshi got confused, hell who wouldn\'t in that situation? If I see an ex of mine, I don\'t just jump him and kiss him like there isn\'t a tomorrow (not even when I still have feelings for him and are totally overjoyed to see him again.)
Ran how ever does score points by confessing to Ken (and especially cause he tells everything) and if I\'m totally honest I would also forgive Ran after what he said. Part of me does understand why Ran did it and then there is still this connection between Ran and Hiroshi.
The shower scene was just lovely and so sweet! And the pj\'s are just superb! I also want one! (pouts)
I also loved how you let Ran think that the only way to get of being killed by calling this early, is if it is to give Ken the day off. Luckily for Schuldig it was just that. And nice going Ran to unplug the phone. Those were my thoughts exactly. Just be sure you can\'t get interrupted anymore.
And what whit this kinky sex? Are you moving up on the ladder? And I do understand that Ran was panting after unbuttening Ken\'s shirt with his tongue and teeth. It really must be hard work, LOL.
And you just have to love Shion! He is a real knight in shinning armor although Kai defenitly doesn\'t need on. You go Girl! I just love her! And I agree that lust is playing definitl a hugh part in Hiroshi\'s feelings for Ran. And craziness, man 400 years is just a long time to be consumed by your love for someone!
Well, I have to say that Ran is very brave to open the door dressed only in a pair of pants and semen. I would never dare that (I can already see the whole street running away screaming, LOL! But when he at first just relaxed in Ken instead of going to open the door, I just laughed (Hey, shouldn\'t you go open the door?) no wonder Kai had to resort to pouncing on the door. (Yeah, she is just superb! Yes, I am a definitly Kai fan if you hadn\'t noticed yet.)
So if Hiroshi is brought back from the dead, then who is behind that and why? Who is the enemy that is still hidden behind the curtain? Cause I go for the resurrection story and not the other explanation.
Uhm Baby doll? I have a little problem with seeing Shion say this. I would think he would call his lover something else more suffisticater. But well that\'s my feelings on it. And if I was Ken I would be red as tomato while Shion explains about the link to Kai. Getting so much compliments, ...
Ken being called the stupid stick with which Ran had been hit and had made Ran to trusting towards others, made me laugh. It is true that Ken always wants to see the best in others and that this makes him to easy going, but hell that is just the way I like him!
But why did Kai and Shion leave? They just drop this huge bom and then leave. \"Well good luck and hope you make out alive. See ye.\" You could help for crying out load. But I guess they will come back since you speak later in the chapter about getting the group back together to go and fight Hiroshi. YES BIG FIGHT! Can\'t wait!
But is Ran deaf or what? Kai just tells that Hiroshi will kill Ken if he have to and Ran just thinks about sex. (\"Idiot\" kicks Ran)
At least Ran is honest about what he feels for his ex but dragging Kase into it was a very bad decision. Of course Ken doesn\'t want to see him any more. Hell Ran were where you previous story? Of course Ran hasn\'t had such an experience with Hiroshi so his love is still there.
Ken gave a nice speech at the end of the chapter and it held much truth. The boy has really matured! But what is this obsession about sex?
So is the darkening sky a sign of impending doom? Just know that it is always the darkest before dawn.
Kisses and hugs
Gillie
So on to chapter 7 and 7,5. I knew that Ran wouldn\'t be able to resist to call Hiroshi. Even when he tore the card and tyhrew it away, I just kept thinking \"How long till you\'ll get the pieces back out of the trash and call your ex?\" But I guess that no one will be surprised that he did this cause the connection between Ran and Hiroshi is just too strong.
When I read that Ran immediately started kissing Hiroshi, I just went like: Okay, this is something that Ken would love to hear. \"Hey kitten, I just couldn\'t help myself, I had to go and see Hiroshi. And guess what, before we even started talking, we were kissing each other madly.\" But Ran didn\'t have to confess at all cause he got sprong (that\'s what you get when you do this in such a public place).
Well you just have to love Crawford for knowing where he has to show up and when. But what with his vision? Will the group be able to prevent it? Actually, I\'m hoping that they won\'t be able to cause I would love to see how they would get out that situation. Oh and the part where you wrote that Farfie was very absorbed in his driving or that he just was trying to decide if he should hit the nun, made me laugh. You just go Farfie!
Ken\'s reaction to Crawford\'s explanation about Ran\'s occupation for the moment, was just so typically. If you get to hear something like that, you just don\'t want to believe it at first. Unfortunately the poor desk of Ken had to suffer the consequences (I love you Crawford!) and in the end poor Kenken didn\'t really got a choice in the matter as Crawford drags him along (no you don\'t get a choice in this one Ken) to go and spy on Ran. I found it really lovely cause it just shows that Crawford cares for them (hugs Crawford).
But poor Ken. It must have really hurt to see Ran kissing his ex and then even more since it is in a public place. A place that Ran never wanted to be so passionate with you. Ken wasn\'t good enough for that, but Hiroshi is just a whole different story. (Well, I actually think that Ran looses a bit of his rational thinking when he is with Hiroshi. He also gets consumed by lust, so definitaly not healthy. But the lust that he feels for Ken is mixed with love and thus far more pure. Hiroshi only gets the lust bit.)
If I was Ken, I wouldn\'t have headed back to the office but I would have let Crawford drive me home so I could pack up some stuff and go and stay in a hotel for a while so I could think about it all (yes, I react always far too emotional!).
But why didn\'t Crawford tell Ken also about the vision he had?
Now back to the kissing couple. Let me just say eaw! Why continue kissing if he tasts rotten? And what is this whole declaration about Ken being the only one for Ran? The kissing really did prove that! I can understand that Hiroshi got confused, hell who wouldn\'t in that situation? If I see an ex of mine, I don\'t just jump him and kiss him like there isn\'t a tomorrow (not even when I still have feelings for him and are totally overjoyed to see him again.)
Ran how ever does score points by confessing to Ken (and especially cause he tells everything) and if I\'m totally honest I would also forgive Ran after what he said. Part of me does understand why Ran did it and then there is still this connection between Ran and Hiroshi.
The shower scene was just lovely and so sweet! And the pj\'s are just superb! I also want one! (pouts)
I also loved how you let Ran think that the only way to get of being killed by calling this early, is if it is to give Ken the day off. Luckily for Schuldig it was just that. And nice going Ran to unplug the phone. Those were my thoughts exactly. Just be sure you can\'t get interrupted anymore.
And what whit this kinky sex? Are you moving up on the ladder? And I do understand that Ran was panting after unbuttening Ken\'s shirt with his tongue and teeth. It really must be hard work, LOL.
And you just have to love Shion! He is a real knight in shinning armor although Kai defenitly doesn\'t need on. You go Girl! I just love her! And I agree that lust is playing definitl a hugh part in Hiroshi\'s feelings for Ran. And craziness, man 400 years is just a long time to be consumed by your love for someone!
Well, I have to say that Ran is very brave to open the door dressed only in a pair of pants and semen. I would never dare that (I can already see the whole street running away screaming, LOL! But when he at first just relaxed in Ken instead of going to open the door, I just laughed (Hey, shouldn\'t you go open the door?) no wonder Kai had to resort to pouncing on the door. (Yeah, she is just superb! Yes, I am a definitly Kai fan if you hadn\'t noticed yet.)
So if Hiroshi is brought back from the dead, then who is behind that and why? Who is the enemy that is still hidden behind the curtain? Cause I go for the resurrection story and not the other explanation.
Uhm Baby doll? I have a little problem with seeing Shion say this. I would think he would call his lover something else more suffisticater. But well that\'s my feelings on it. And if I was Ken I would be red as tomato while Shion explains about the link to Kai. Getting so much compliments, ...
Ken being called the stupid stick with which Ran had been hit and had made Ran to trusting towards others, made me laugh. It is true that Ken always wants to see the best in others and that this makes him to easy going, but hell that is just the way I like him!
But why did Kai and Shion leave? They just drop this huge bom and then leave. \"Well good luck and hope you make out alive. See ye.\" You could help for crying out load. But I guess they will come back since you speak later in the chapter about getting the group back together to go and fight Hiroshi. YES BIG FIGHT! Can\'t wait!
But is Ran deaf or what? Kai just tells that Hiroshi will kill Ken if he have to and Ran just thinks about sex. (\"Idiot\" kicks Ran)
At least Ran is honest about what he feels for his ex but dragging Kase into it was a very bad decision. Of course Ken doesn\'t want to see him any more. Hell Ran were where you previous story? Of course Ran hasn\'t had such an experience with Hiroshi so his love is still there.
Ken gave a nice speech at the end of the chapter and it held much truth. The boy has really matured! But what is this obsession about sex?
So is the darkening sky a sign of impending doom? Just know that it is always the darkest before dawn.
Kisses and hugs
Gillie
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August 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Here we go again.
The butler you had working for Hiroshi is just the kind of creature you\'d expect. Unfortunately for that creature his lifespan was cut short. This made me think of Star Wars were Dark Vader just kills of his second in command when he brought news that Dark Vader didn\'t like or when something went wrong. Dark Vader also just killed his second in command and replaced him then with the next one in command. (Definately not a boss I want to work for,LOL)
But hey, did you read my mind? I wanted to ask in this review if Ken was still working for Yohji and this chapter just answered my question. But why didn\'t Ken ask Hiroshi for the names ofthe persons that he is looking for? I would think that that would also be a standard question that Ken could have already asked. And as for Hiroshi wanting to repay Shion, I went immediately \"In which way do you mean?\". I just think that there is a whole lot more behind the story how Hiroshi should have died. Maybe Shion tipped the vampire hunters so that Hiroshi would be killed and that Ran would be protected cause Hiroshi was loosing the plot (or that\'s what you\'ve been implying in previous chapters and he still is wacko). And the look Hiroshi had while saying this to Yohji kinda confirmed that suspision.
But congratulations to Yohji. You really must be a good detective to be able to hid that you know the persons some one is looking for. I wouldn\'t be able to do that. I just would go \"Hey, I know him. Etc.\"
And okay, I did say that Kai and Shion made a beautiful couple, but getting engaged after one week? Isn\'t that a little bit fast???!!! I did laugh how ever when Kai showed the engagement ring (if we can still call it that, maybe engagement rock would be better) and told Ran and Ken that Shion was upset that that was the only size he could buy legally. Poor Shion, LOL.
And I also loved how you made Yohji turn into that protective old brother who just wants to look out for his little sister. It was so nice!!!
As for Ken telling Ran about Hiroshi, I wish I could say that he did it because he completely trusts Ran but if that was the case, then Ken wouldn\'t have delivered that whole speech to Ran. Anyways, Ken opened Pandora\'s box himself while Yohji wanted to keep it closed. (You should have listened to Yohji!!!)
Hope to be able to read the next chapter pretty soon cause I\'m looking forward to Ran and Hiroshi\'s meeting (although you always have to be careful with what you want).
Kisses and huges
Gillie
The butler you had working for Hiroshi is just the kind of creature you\'d expect. Unfortunately for that creature his lifespan was cut short. This made me think of Star Wars were Dark Vader just kills of his second in command when he brought news that Dark Vader didn\'t like or when something went wrong. Dark Vader also just killed his second in command and replaced him then with the next one in command. (Definately not a boss I want to work for,LOL)
But hey, did you read my mind? I wanted to ask in this review if Ken was still working for Yohji and this chapter just answered my question. But why didn\'t Ken ask Hiroshi for the names ofthe persons that he is looking for? I would think that that would also be a standard question that Ken could have already asked. And as for Hiroshi wanting to repay Shion, I went immediately \"In which way do you mean?\". I just think that there is a whole lot more behind the story how Hiroshi should have died. Maybe Shion tipped the vampire hunters so that Hiroshi would be killed and that Ran would be protected cause Hiroshi was loosing the plot (or that\'s what you\'ve been implying in previous chapters and he still is wacko). And the look Hiroshi had while saying this to Yohji kinda confirmed that suspision.
But congratulations to Yohji. You really must be a good detective to be able to hid that you know the persons some one is looking for. I wouldn\'t be able to do that. I just would go \"Hey, I know him. Etc.\"
And okay, I did say that Kai and Shion made a beautiful couple, but getting engaged after one week? Isn\'t that a little bit fast???!!! I did laugh how ever when Kai showed the engagement ring (if we can still call it that, maybe engagement rock would be better) and told Ran and Ken that Shion was upset that that was the only size he could buy legally. Poor Shion, LOL.
And I also loved how you made Yohji turn into that protective old brother who just wants to look out for his little sister. It was so nice!!!
As for Ken telling Ran about Hiroshi, I wish I could say that he did it because he completely trusts Ran but if that was the case, then Ken wouldn\'t have delivered that whole speech to Ran. Anyways, Ken opened Pandora\'s box himself while Yohji wanted to keep it closed. (You should have listened to Yohji!!!)
Hope to be able to read the next chapter pretty soon cause I\'m looking forward to Ran and Hiroshi\'s meeting (although you always have to be careful with what you want).
Kisses and huges
Gillie
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August 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey, first of all you don\'t have to thank me for reviewing, it\'s my pleasure. I don\'t review to get a thank you, I just do it so I can voice my thoughts about certain things and so I can try to guess what will be coming next.
But on to the chapter. It just started with such a beautiful description that it made me just wish that I was there with my lover instead of Ran and Ken (sighs).
What the whole Ran and Ken relationship conciders, I\'m beginning to have opposite feelings about them. On the one hand I think it is really beautiful that you can be so in love with some one like Ran is with Ken but on the other hand it also makes me sad because Ran doesn\'t seem to be able to live without Ken. I believe that no matter how much you\'re in love, you\'re still two individuals who don\'t do everything together and so still have a life beside that of the one with their lover. A life they can turn to should the relationship end. But weel, that\'s just my opinion.
So you\'re making our Shion turn into e real gantleman now are you? The saving Kai from that jerk was so chivery and the kissing of her hand, oh man where do you still find men like that? It\'s just so romantic and if it would be me in Kai\'s place, well i\'d be sold immediately (yes, I\'m a hopeless romanticus). But I guess I\'ll have to use a time machine in order to find some one like that cause the guys now a days simply aren\'t like that any more (sighs again).
But way to go Kai! The way she greeted Shion was just superb. It made me laugh so hard! It would definately be something to tell your grandchildren but I guess vampires can\'t get children and so grandchildren are also out of the question. (too bad)
But can we expect more Shion and Kai in the future? \"There may be something there\" (just like with Belle and the Beast). So when Ken said that he thought Shion was gay, I just went: \"He\'s gay?! (grabs Ken at his collar and starts shaking him) Nooooo!!! What about my romance? The wedding I\'ve already planned for them?! Aaahhh it\'s all down the drain!\" (starts crying and does a dramatic fall to the floor) Luckily there is still Ran who saved me from my waterfalls.
I really like Kai and I\'m glad that she has showed back up in the story. Let\'s just hope she keeps popping up as the story continues.
And Ran also scored some points with me by thinking of the poor dog when the meat was totally ruined by oud dear Ken kitten. You just go Ran! (does a little cheerleader\'s dance while spelling Ran\'s name).
The congratulations Aya got from Ken were also magnificant. It just made me laugh and i went \"Nice congrats Ken kitten\".
But the way Aya just barches inn and Kai calls to tell them about her date with Shion, made me realize that they have really become one big family with their group and that made me feel warm inside. I really like that.
Okay, I\'m out of things to say so I guess this is goodbye.
Kisses and hugs
Gillie
But on to the chapter. It just started with such a beautiful description that it made me just wish that I was there with my lover instead of Ran and Ken (sighs).
What the whole Ran and Ken relationship conciders, I\'m beginning to have opposite feelings about them. On the one hand I think it is really beautiful that you can be so in love with some one like Ran is with Ken but on the other hand it also makes me sad because Ran doesn\'t seem to be able to live without Ken. I believe that no matter how much you\'re in love, you\'re still two individuals who don\'t do everything together and so still have a life beside that of the one with their lover. A life they can turn to should the relationship end. But weel, that\'s just my opinion.
So you\'re making our Shion turn into e real gantleman now are you? The saving Kai from that jerk was so chivery and the kissing of her hand, oh man where do you still find men like that? It\'s just so romantic and if it would be me in Kai\'s place, well i\'d be sold immediately (yes, I\'m a hopeless romanticus). But I guess I\'ll have to use a time machine in order to find some one like that cause the guys now a days simply aren\'t like that any more (sighs again).
But way to go Kai! The way she greeted Shion was just superb. It made me laugh so hard! It would definately be something to tell your grandchildren but I guess vampires can\'t get children and so grandchildren are also out of the question. (too bad)
But can we expect more Shion and Kai in the future? \"There may be something there\" (just like with Belle and the Beast). So when Ken said that he thought Shion was gay, I just went: \"He\'s gay?! (grabs Ken at his collar and starts shaking him) Nooooo!!! What about my romance? The wedding I\'ve already planned for them?! Aaahhh it\'s all down the drain!\" (starts crying and does a dramatic fall to the floor) Luckily there is still Ran who saved me from my waterfalls.
I really like Kai and I\'m glad that she has showed back up in the story. Let\'s just hope she keeps popping up as the story continues.
And Ran also scored some points with me by thinking of the poor dog when the meat was totally ruined by oud dear Ken kitten. You just go Ran! (does a little cheerleader\'s dance while spelling Ran\'s name).
The congratulations Aya got from Ken were also magnificant. It just made me laugh and i went \"Nice congrats Ken kitten\".
But the way Aya just barches inn and Kai calls to tell them about her date with Shion, made me realize that they have really become one big family with their group and that made me feel warm inside. I really like that.
Okay, I\'m out of things to say so I guess this is goodbye.
Kisses and hugs
Gillie
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August 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Whoah, you work fast! I hadn\'t expected an update yet, not that I complain, LOL.
Well, you\'ve told us now how Hiroshi should have died, but since he\'s still here, how did he escape then from the vampire hunters with his life in tact? Did he make a deal with those vampire hunters to set other vampires up so that his life would be spared? Was it just luck? Guess we\'ll just have to wait a little longer.
Once again I got this picture of \'child Ran\' in my head when he seated himself on Ken\'s lap, nearly started to cry and had to be comforted by Ken. It is just like with a small child! Man Ran really has some serious psychological problems. In the beginning he was such a strong guy and now he\'s just a mere shadow from who he just to be. It is kinda sad.
When you let Shion think about Ran\'s mansion that is supposed to be empty, was that a hint to where Hiroshi is at the moment? Has Hiroshi neared our two lovers? And when will Ran\'s birthday be there cause you said in the first chapter that it would be then that Hiroshi would come and claim Ran. Personally I can\'t wait for the face to face confrontation!
The interaction between Yohji and Ran was just great, hilarious actually and poor Kenken who got teased with even after that. The boy really has a blushing problem although I think I would have the same problem if my lover would say such things. But why the hell wasn\'t Yohji there sooner? Ken is his old time friend so I would have guessed that when Schuldig said Ken was in problems, that he would have gone with Schuldig to Ken and Ran\'s place.
Thanks by the way for the explanation about what had taken place that night cause it still was a little unclair to me. I thought Hiroshi had tried to establish a link to Ken (to get rid of the poor boy) and severed Ran and Ken\'s link for that purpose but I was a little off.
As for the spider part. If it was me instead of Ken, I would have pushed Ran ASAP of me and bolted out of the room. I\'m terrified from those ugly animals and I can get really worked up if I see one (let\'s say it\'s almost a phobie with me). So my sympathy goes to Ken and I think he was very brave to have stayed in the room all the same. But why has Ken been locked up in the basement when he was younger? Is this something that will play a bigger part in the rest of the story? It is kinda true that although Ran\'s past isn\'t all that clear, that there are also still many questions we can ask about Ken\'s past.
Well that was it for me for this chapter. Oh no wait, I loved the last sentence in which you say that Ken gives Ran a soft tender smile that Ken only gives to Ran. It was so lovely!!!! Aaahhh love, sighs.
Till next time
Gillie
Well, you\'ve told us now how Hiroshi should have died, but since he\'s still here, how did he escape then from the vampire hunters with his life in tact? Did he make a deal with those vampire hunters to set other vampires up so that his life would be spared? Was it just luck? Guess we\'ll just have to wait a little longer.
Once again I got this picture of \'child Ran\' in my head when he seated himself on Ken\'s lap, nearly started to cry and had to be comforted by Ken. It is just like with a small child! Man Ran really has some serious psychological problems. In the beginning he was such a strong guy and now he\'s just a mere shadow from who he just to be. It is kinda sad.
When you let Shion think about Ran\'s mansion that is supposed to be empty, was that a hint to where Hiroshi is at the moment? Has Hiroshi neared our two lovers? And when will Ran\'s birthday be there cause you said in the first chapter that it would be then that Hiroshi would come and claim Ran. Personally I can\'t wait for the face to face confrontation!
The interaction between Yohji and Ran was just great, hilarious actually and poor Kenken who got teased with even after that. The boy really has a blushing problem although I think I would have the same problem if my lover would say such things. But why the hell wasn\'t Yohji there sooner? Ken is his old time friend so I would have guessed that when Schuldig said Ken was in problems, that he would have gone with Schuldig to Ken and Ran\'s place.
Thanks by the way for the explanation about what had taken place that night cause it still was a little unclair to me. I thought Hiroshi had tried to establish a link to Ken (to get rid of the poor boy) and severed Ran and Ken\'s link for that purpose but I was a little off.
As for the spider part. If it was me instead of Ken, I would have pushed Ran ASAP of me and bolted out of the room. I\'m terrified from those ugly animals and I can get really worked up if I see one (let\'s say it\'s almost a phobie with me). So my sympathy goes to Ken and I think he was very brave to have stayed in the room all the same. But why has Ken been locked up in the basement when he was younger? Is this something that will play a bigger part in the rest of the story? It is kinda true that although Ran\'s past isn\'t all that clear, that there are also still many questions we can ask about Ken\'s past.
Well that was it for me for this chapter. Oh no wait, I loved the last sentence in which you say that Ken gives Ran a soft tender smile that Ken only gives to Ran. It was so lovely!!!! Aaahhh love, sighs.
Till next time
Gillie
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August 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey,
to start with, thank you for finally naming Ran\'s ex-lover (last time I\'ll type this) it \'ll make it a lot easier to say something about him. And speaking of Hiroshi, I truelly feel sorry for him. It must be horrible to be that obsessed with one person so that nothing else seems to count any more. But wath is this with all these links that all the vampires have with each other? I just thought Ran and Hiroshi were connected but there seems to be a whole lot more persons connected with each other. And I have to say that that is a very nice idea from you, hell it\'s an excellent idea! Although this of course makes Hiroshi a whole lot more dangerous. Up till now the link between Ran and Ken has been strong enough for Hiroshi\'s plans to fail, but we can only wonderhow long this will continue. Hiroshi will definately become stronger as time passes (and his obssession takes a turn for the worse for as far this isn\'t the case yet). So it is time that our guys get into action cause now things have had a good ending but they won\'t stay that lucky.
I loved how you dumped poor Ken twice. First he is dumped verbally by Ran who calls out to his other lover and to make things worse poor Kenken gets shoved out of Ran\'s embrace and falls to the floor. Poor kitten. Let\'s hope three is not a charm.
Oh and by the way, I just love that nick name of Ken. It always makes my heart feel warm when Ran calls him his \'kitten\'. It\'s just so cute and fitting for Ken!
Well that\'s it for me. Hope to read the next chapter soon and until then,
May the night bring you inspiration!
Gillie
to start with, thank you for finally naming Ran\'s ex-lover (last time I\'ll type this) it \'ll make it a lot easier to say something about him. And speaking of Hiroshi, I truelly feel sorry for him. It must be horrible to be that obsessed with one person so that nothing else seems to count any more. But wath is this with all these links that all the vampires have with each other? I just thought Ran and Hiroshi were connected but there seems to be a whole lot more persons connected with each other. And I have to say that that is a very nice idea from you, hell it\'s an excellent idea! Although this of course makes Hiroshi a whole lot more dangerous. Up till now the link between Ran and Ken has been strong enough for Hiroshi\'s plans to fail, but we can only wonderhow long this will continue. Hiroshi will definately become stronger as time passes (and his obssession takes a turn for the worse for as far this isn\'t the case yet). So it is time that our guys get into action cause now things have had a good ending but they won\'t stay that lucky.
I loved how you dumped poor Ken twice. First he is dumped verbally by Ran who calls out to his other lover and to make things worse poor Kenken gets shoved out of Ran\'s embrace and falls to the floor. Poor kitten. Let\'s hope three is not a charm.
Oh and by the way, I just love that nick name of Ken. It always makes my heart feel warm when Ran calls him his \'kitten\'. It\'s just so cute and fitting for Ken!
Well that\'s it for me. Hope to read the next chapter soon and until then,
May the night bring you inspiration!
Gillie
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July 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, another chapter! (starts doing a victory dance) Okay what to say about this second chapter? Let\'s start with saying that I\'m dead jealous at Ran\'s ex-lover for the color of his eyes. Man I wish I had stormy blue eyes (pouts a little). But he can keep the rest of his personnality because he just creeps me out. While I was reading the first part I just kept thinking \"Man, he\'s crazy!\" It definately gives new meaning to the proverb \'Love makes you do the wacky\'. Just keep him away from me!!!
I liked the little scene with Ran and Ken on the soccerfield. Kai made just such a nice comment there that I just had to laugh, but I guess that comment was needed because when Ran and Ken seem to get involved into each other, they just forget where they are and who can see them. And those kids are definately to yopung for sex education!
But poor Ran is really going down hill. At a certain moment (when Ken tells him he won\'t leave him and Ran just keeps staring at the floor) I couldn\'t help but think of Ran as a small kid that needed reassuring in a very bad way. Has this maybe something to do with his ex-lover? Does he have some kind of power over Ran? And when Ran thinks Ken isn\'t coming back because he called another man\'s name in his near sleep, are you then talking about Ken who calls out Shion\'s name or is it Ran who calls out his ex-lover\'s name? It was kinda confusing for me, so please clarify it for me???
And as for Ran\'s fear that Ken will leave him and that he\'ll stay behind all alone, I fear it will be the other way around although Ken won\'t break because of it (he\'s grown in this, become stronger).
Schuldig and Yohji had their fun also in this chapter. It must have been some pretty side to walk on in and the part with the hose was just brilliant!
Well that\'s it for this chapter although I\'d like to say (or write) a few things in the more general sense.
As I was reading this chapter I began thinking that actually Ran\'s ex-lover is a victim. He is created by Ran\'s lust and not his love while the ex-lover (damn it, give us his name next chapter will ye because always typing \'Ran\'s ex-lover\' is so long) probably loved Ran to dead and would have done anything for him even this changing into a vampire.
But in your previous story you let Shion tell Ken that Ran wanted to spend the rest of his days with this ex-lover, so isn\'t there then some love involved? I don\'t see some one stay the rest of his life (and in Ran\'s case that\'s a very long time) with some body else just out of lust.
And what exactly happened to make Ran believe his ex-lover is death? Was there a fight? Did they have to kill him because he was getting to obsessed with Ran? Did he found out what Ran\'s motivation was for turning him into a vamp? WHAT????!!!!!
Hope will get some answers next chapter and till then,
be careful at night!
Gillie
I liked the little scene with Ran and Ken on the soccerfield. Kai made just such a nice comment there that I just had to laugh, but I guess that comment was needed because when Ran and Ken seem to get involved into each other, they just forget where they are and who can see them. And those kids are definately to yopung for sex education!
But poor Ran is really going down hill. At a certain moment (when Ken tells him he won\'t leave him and Ran just keeps staring at the floor) I couldn\'t help but think of Ran as a small kid that needed reassuring in a very bad way. Has this maybe something to do with his ex-lover? Does he have some kind of power over Ran? And when Ran thinks Ken isn\'t coming back because he called another man\'s name in his near sleep, are you then talking about Ken who calls out Shion\'s name or is it Ran who calls out his ex-lover\'s name? It was kinda confusing for me, so please clarify it for me???
And as for Ran\'s fear that Ken will leave him and that he\'ll stay behind all alone, I fear it will be the other way around although Ken won\'t break because of it (he\'s grown in this, become stronger).
Schuldig and Yohji had their fun also in this chapter. It must have been some pretty side to walk on in and the part with the hose was just brilliant!
Well that\'s it for this chapter although I\'d like to say (or write) a few things in the more general sense.
As I was reading this chapter I began thinking that actually Ran\'s ex-lover is a victim. He is created by Ran\'s lust and not his love while the ex-lover (damn it, give us his name next chapter will ye because always typing \'Ran\'s ex-lover\' is so long) probably loved Ran to dead and would have done anything for him even this changing into a vampire.
But in your previous story you let Shion tell Ken that Ran wanted to spend the rest of his days with this ex-lover, so isn\'t there then some love involved? I don\'t see some one stay the rest of his life (and in Ran\'s case that\'s a very long time) with some body else just out of lust.
And what exactly happened to make Ran believe his ex-lover is death? Was there a fight? Did they have to kill him because he was getting to obsessed with Ran? Did he found out what Ran\'s motivation was for turning him into a vamp? WHAT????!!!!!
Hope will get some answers next chapter and till then,
be careful at night!
Gillie
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July 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WWaah! a sequel! I read Night\'s addiction and totally fell in love with RanKen. Lot\'s of angst and incredible writing style! keep going! I can\'t wait for the next chapter.
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July 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yay your back and withh a sequal it looks to have a verry interesting start but promise meyou wont make them suffer to much. and poor ken if things keep up like this he\'ll have a concussion