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Ryoma kun is nice to fuji and wants to take up for him. Like your chapter.

Sweetheart, I like your story, but you seriously need to at least reread your own work before you post it, if not get a beta reader. One: you have tongue spelled at least four different way, none of which are correct. Two: it is spelled ‘jaw’ not ‘jall’. ‘Jall’ isn’t even a word. Three: I’m not sure what ‘disaponted’ is but disappointed is what I thought you might mean. One more and I will stop (though there are many, many more): I don’t know what ‘moun’ing is but I’m sure they were both probably moaning a lot. E-mail me sometime and I'd be willing to beta your work for you, including that which you already have up. send it to soubi.loveless@yahoo.com (this is my girlfriend's aff account)

Okay I really like this story but there is one HUGE problem with it...You need to get some one to beta your work. I dont mean to be harsh but you have way to many spellng errors. If you need one, you can email me and I would be happy to do it for you. But that really needs to get fix because some of the wording is hard to understand. You may not speak english for a first language but if that is the case then you should definitely find some one to help you in correcting you work.
Other wise, you story is really good and I enjoy it. I like this pairing alot so I am happy I am getting to read it <33

hey!!!!why not make another ryoxfuji.........i think fuji should be the uke...ne? i mean looks like a girl right...i betryoma would love that!!!

HI! I really liked this story...The lemon was hot...but in chapter 7...I noticed a lot of spelling errors...AND I know you said they weren\'t beta\'d but I\'d like to help you with that...here are some words

Officially; Relationship; Expression; Revenge; Disappointment; Seductively; Taken aback (these are the hardest ones, or some of the harder ones)

I really really don\'t want to sound mean or anything...cuz I LOVE this story...But I can help you Beta it...or what not...just email me and let me know...I\'m not the BEST, but I can definitely help you out with the spelling, grammar and punctuation. I rate this a 5 because it\'s that damn good...but I WILL help you with grammar and stuff if you want

I absolutely loved your lemon fic. It \"was\" damn good! I hope you write more though, because adultfanfiction would be at a loss without your awesome lemon fics. *Fujikochick laughing* I especially loved the part where Fuji slapped Tezuka! That was an awesome moment in Prince of Tennis fanfiction history!

FANFICTION NO SUGOI!!!!

Okay, I really like the story. It is a cute idea and a great beginning for the Trill Pair, my favorite pairing.
The spelling and the sentence structure leave a LOT to be desired.
Oy! I\'ve never seen so many ways to spell tongue in my life.
If you ever need a beta or someone to check over what you\'ve written, please just let me know.

YAY!!!!
Chapter 8 was SO much better!!!
Not just the lemon. *^__^*
It was a presentation worthy of the story!
Good Job!
(small side note: Revenge ~__^ )

Actually, (Since no one really reviewed) I really enjoyed this story. (Even though I am not a big fan of yaoi) Anyways, it was a great story! Kudos to you! You did a great job. You should write more fics. Your\'s has story to it which is good. ^^ Great job!