rate_review Reviews

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5043487/1/Barely_Breathing

your story was stolen and posted on fanfiction.net by a 16yr old- she also stole one of my stories called All Bets Are Off.... I suggest you notify the site administrator!!!

DLS.... aka Rita White

*Smiles* Your chacterization is much better, nice job! The names you have Gojyo calling Sanzo have me rolling my eyes, lol, but that\'s nothing to complain about. I can see him saying them, actually, to torment Sanzo. Lol! Slight sap, but it\'s not like it isn\'t allowed, heh. Besides, it\'s funnier than hell, lol! Good job, Befanini- I\'m curently wondering if I spelled that even close, lol- you\'ve improved a LOT! *Peace sign*

*Rolls her eyes, grumbling* Stupid thing got sent before I said the last thing, lol. I think you need to make your formatting just a bit more fluid, lol. The A, B, C, D, ect., have me going cross-eyed. Snerk. Perhaps longer scenes like you had in the first chapter? *Winks* My previous compliments still stand, lol.

loved the first chapter, second and third were a bit confusing.

OMFG! I\'m swooning! So hot in here, nes pa? ~fanning self~ ^_^

OMFG I WANT TO HAVE YOUR CHILDRENN!!!!!

i love it obviously^^ i mean im not....---- shutting up

Oh god i love how you protrayed them!! awesomw!!!!!
You are teh pwn^^