rate_review Reviews

I\'m liking this so far, and the concept is interesting. Everyone seems pretty much in character, with Tatsumi being a small exception. He just seems a bit over zealous. however, that may not be exactly OOC for him. everyone sees different parts of a character\'s personality.

One suggestion, if I may. While describing what is happening is fine and all, to really flesh out a story and give it life one should also describe ambients. An example would be in the second chapter, Tsuzuki and Hisoka are on earth. Is it warm out? Windy?

As I said, your story is interesting and quite enjoyable sofar. I look forward to reading more.

Hey this is off to a good start! I loved Dirty Laundery and the promise of something new and
yet similar is certainly good. I love that you are showing Tatsumi\'s possesive streak and Hisoka\'s
sometimes highly annoying grumpiness. I hope you continue on with this!

Hm, I\'m not a member of aff.net, though I need to be, but I will certainly review this! I, too, have read \'dirty laundry\' and I absolutely loved it! I wish that there were more stories with Muraki on bottom! Sexy guys are best on the bottom, there\'s just something hot about that...anyways, my only advice is to try to go into a bit more detail, other than that, you have me on the edge of my seat in anticipation for the next chapter! I\'ll definitely be on the lookout for it!

I like your story and want to read more update soon!