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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Lol. No need to figure out why Luffy's acting dark. The Devil Fruit doesn't bestow just the power; it also bestows a curse. Eh, I don't know what I'm saying but let's put it this way: Devil = Evil /// Luffy + Gomu Gomu Fruit = Rubberman + a dash of devilness! Don't ask; I don't even know why I did it? Anyways, I hope to read more later...maybe? Oh no, I love it; I just need to focus on other things though...
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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oi, Zoro! Keep yer hands offa Luffy's woman! You too Sanji! She ain't yours; she's Luffy's, well, going to be...soon?
I like how the story's progressing, even it if's still the beginning...
I like how the story's progressing, even it if's still the beginning...
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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You sure know how to develop a story! Great, now even Zolo/Zoro's after Nami!
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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Melody, that seductive tramp! She might as well take Sanji or Zoro!
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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Whoa, that was close! Dark Luffy almost got Nami! Still, I would have loved to see how it goes, as long as it's Luffy and Nami... *grins sheepishly*
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June 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Was this really on ffdotnet before? If it was, then how come I never knew about it. It's really interesting, I always wanted to read a LuffyxNami that wasn't just sex all the time or drama or whatever. I'm an adventurous person, I look for adventure, the journey, the story in the book. Eh, I should talk too much; the fict just started!
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October 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great story. Think you could write some Nami and Luffy NC-17 fics on this sight.
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July 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
im only up to chapter 3 but the sec a evil transformation of a good guy happens. its automatically a great story!
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November 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
very good, very good indeed course I\'ve only seen the english version of the show so sometimes the name differences confuse me
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September 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What a nice treat - to find that you\'d updated!
I really enjoyed this story very much.
I hope you\'ll write another nice story, soon.
Okay, now for the critique part. I thought you did a fairly nice job with the psychology in the last chapters. It wasn\'t really accurate according to what shrinks really talk about - but since most psychology is guesses anyway, I didn\'t really have a problem with it. The only comment I had was that it did feel like you were trying a bit too hard to make the characters psyches be rationalized. I got the feeling you were really worried that if you didn\'t give enough of a reason behind their splits that no one would have accepted it. In reality, I think you could have taken it easier on yourself. Your writing and your love of the characters is why the story is so good. Rationalization wasn\'t really needed. So relax in your next story. It\'ll be great!
Hope this was helpful.
Kashu
I really enjoyed this story very much.
I hope you\'ll write another nice story, soon.
Okay, now for the critique part. I thought you did a fairly nice job with the psychology in the last chapters. It wasn\'t really accurate according to what shrinks really talk about - but since most psychology is guesses anyway, I didn\'t really have a problem with it. The only comment I had was that it did feel like you were trying a bit too hard to make the characters psyches be rationalized. I got the feeling you were really worried that if you didn\'t give enough of a reason behind their splits that no one would have accepted it. In reality, I think you could have taken it easier on yourself. Your writing and your love of the characters is why the story is so good. Rationalization wasn\'t really needed. So relax in your next story. It\'ll be great!
Hope this was helpful.
Kashu