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it was good but on parts u left things out like mugen taking his clothes off and them ending up on the ground but other than that it was great

update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
hot and sext.......but still innocent on fuu\'s part
great job!!!
will you email me on the next update? please???!!!!

I loved it. i feel like masturbating now... lol

this was fucking hot! wow! I CAN\'T BELIEVE HOW WELL YOU CAPTURED MUGEN! I honestly think Fuu would be easier to capture, which you did well with her as well, but mugen was amazing! holy shit! I would say you might want to put spoiler in there, cuz I haven\'t seen the end yet and from what I read in your fic it sounded like the sunflower samurai is her father or something, so a spoiler would be nice. lets see... construcive.... if anything, a bit more detail? there was plenty but I love knowing what the environment looked like, I thought the path they were on was steep, but then I thought that mugen was lying down, so I got a bit confused there, but that\'s all... it truly is nicely put together! as for future fics, I kind of want to see the intimate side of mugen and not the \"just for a fuck\" side but the side that I don\'t know if it could actually exist.... but maybe if fuu got in enough trouble where her life was in danger and he came out, and maybe was shocked himself at this and hesitant... I don\'t know if it would work! but it would be nifty! anyway, sorry this is so long! I\'ll talk to you later! \'k bye!

I\'m Sorry! I forgot to say that I could not tell that this was your first until your note at the end! BRAVO! and when I said that thing about capturing Fuu I didn\'t mean in a \"it was fine\" status I meant it the same as mugen! you captured her perfecty! I could actually feel how embarrassed she was! :p but yeah! O.o ......... >.< \"YES!\" ..... \'k bye!

hey well i read your muge/fuu story, it was great i loved it. I have no idea how u come up with that but it was awsome and I loved every second of it.
however, i wish that mugen would of DONE HER but he didn\'t enen though i really wanted him to and i was dissapointed about that. but besides that I LOVED IT KEEP IT UP. GIME MORE AWSOME STORIES LIKE THAT. and GOOD LUCK.

P.S. would u mind giving me a version that does have then DOING IT. i would love it.

If this is your first i want to see you write more. It was a great idea to introduce the couple to teach Fuu how to do what was needed. Loved it!

Wow, This was very good ^ ^ !!
One of the best smut scene+fic I\'ve ever seen before !
*thumbs up*
Hope to see more Mugen Fuu Fics !
Take Care,
june

Wow, this is honestly your first fanfic? I could have never guessed. It seemed experienced. I liked the part about having the smaller lemon within the lemon. Bravo. The only thing constructive I have to say is that it starts a new paragraph every time someone new speaks. Well good job, and I hope you continue writing. I didn\'t look and see if this is complete or not...so if it is, great job. If not, I\'m looking forward to the next chapter. Oh, and thanks for the Mugen/Fuu. [smacks all Fuu/Jin fans with a dishwasher] >_> Anyway. 8/10, great job.

This was lots of fun. Very hot and very in-character. I liked it. Great first effort!