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August 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really liked that. It\'s not often that you see Jin taking control with his passive personality, but you pulled it off very well. There were a few mistakes here and there, but overall it was a pretty awesome fic. I hope you write some more to either this story or something else Samurai Champloo.
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August 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, for a first fic that wasn\'t bad. A few gramatical errors here and there, but nothing that can\'t be fixed. Next time be more consistant with your discription. All in all it was pretty good. Nice work.
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August 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOO! that was TOTALLY hot. maybe a little out of character, but HOT. dominating jin is so incredibly yummy, and mugen gettin some smutty goodness is even hotter. meoooow. tell me there\'s a sequel!!
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August 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very nice, the detail was good and you kept them nicely in character. A little detail though would be to put a space between each paragraph since it\'s a bit hard on the eyes to read everything smooshed together
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August 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
finally! a dominant jin with mugen yaoi! i liked how you still managed to keep Mugen in character (being crudely honest) The only thing i didn\'t like was the lack of quotation marks (it was a bit confusing in some small parts) but overall, i could understand what was going on-- so, good story!