rate_review Reviews

oh please put a story where yuki gives the brat a good hot spanking with some tlc after!

aww some peole are so meean ignore them i liked it

Don\'t pay any attention to those who seek to destroy a creative mind. Just do your thing as best as you can, you will get better. In my opinion you did not do that bad like some of the reviewer said. It can improve here and there but overall it was good. So, don\'t get discourage keep going at it. I hope to see you updating a new story for us. ;> I love bunnies! ;P

it\'s one thing to give a person an opinion on how you think they could better themselves, but to come on here and be so childish as to bash (with no constructive critism) and not even PUT your name...that\'s just low. and it makes your post even more worthless. grow up. and if you didn\'t like this stroy SO MUCH then you wouldn\'t have bothered reviewing let alone KEEP COMING BACK. wow, you must not really have a life if this is all you look forward to doing. grow up and back off. she\'s doing something that SHE wants to do and some of us like what she\'s written. is it great? no. does it need work? yes. but if we enjoy it and she enjoys writing it then why does it bother YOU?

anyways: don\'t worry about the people who act like that. they need to get lives and learn that if they don\'t like something...they CAN simply IGNORE it. amazing, isn\'t it? anyways, do what ever makes you happy! (^_^) and good luck with the rest of the story...

I liked it a lot .. maybe you could consider doing a sequel .... maybe with Yuki being a bit more dominating .. I dunno but overall it was awesome ..

Liked the concept of your story a lot, it was very hot. The story reads a bit like a script though so you might want to see about filling it out. Keep up the good work!!!

I loved it

This fanfiction was very interesting. I thought that it was fun how they dressed up. You should make more fanfics like this one.

i loved your story ^.^ it was really interesting but now my boyfriend is smiling evily oh dear

...As much as I love drama, the whole thing with Mika being there was half-baked and made your writing look half-baked. Like you were writing a PWP; then somewhere along the way just decided to give it a plot...And honey that is not a bold move. It\'s redundant

This isn\'t a flame, by the way, I\'m just giving you some constructive criticism. Don\'t bother putting in little scenes that require Yuki to make a dramatic speech about his endless love. If you learned to show and not tell, you\'d become a better author, and that\'s the fun of the game, isn\'t it? If there\'s nothing to learn, there\'s no point in going forward jadedly.