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September 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
nicely done, i cant wait for you to write more... anyway keep up the good work
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September 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A relatively nice rei\\shinji flick. I look forward to updates. One of the facts that seems to be overlooked by most fanfiction writers is the fact that there is a damn tank of nude Rei clones just waiting to be activated in terminal dogma. M/F/F/F/F/F/F/F...
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September 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It\'s a pretty hot lemon that\'s let down by a bunch of grammar errors. If you need a need a pre-reader, I\'d be willing to help.
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September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great lemon! althought sorta short it was really well written. I hope you do write those additions you mentioned.
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September 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Dude, fucking amazing. You rock as a storyteller, at least when it comes to making the sex hawt. ;P
Some polishing with miscellaneous writing bits here and there and you could make platinum for sure. If you want a beta-reader (assuming you don\'t have someone already), I wouldn\'t mind one bit helping you out.
...Good God, why weren\'t any of the hot, quiet girls I knew back then as curious as that?!
Some polishing with miscellaneous writing bits here and there and you could make platinum for sure. If you want a beta-reader (assuming you don\'t have someone already), I wouldn\'t mind one bit helping you out.
...Good God, why weren\'t any of the hot, quiet girls I knew back then as curious as that?!
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August 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Pretty good basic lemon. Could use more paragraph breaks. \"Shinji colsed his eyes\" was the only blatant error I noticed in passing. More Rei would be great, Asuka if you must. I like Asuka, I\'m just in a Rei mood right now. :)
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August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Whew! Unusual, but intriguing. I await your next chapter.
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August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awesome fic. Update with more. Maybe include Misato. What many authors don\'t exploit is the fact that she promised Shinji the whole deal after he came back from battlin the eva series. Update soon.
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August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
More please. Very nicely done
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August 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
....... Wow