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September 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease continue this on edge of seat here!!!!
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November 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Finally!I were longing for a fic with this couple!When are you gonna post next chapter?
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September 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please! I need to read more! If I don\'t my head WILL explode
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September 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
My brain depends on this story. Please update!
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August 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I\'m a fan of this coupling, so I did enjoy the fic. Good use of accents (where their understandable, but clearly heard), and very sense-oriented. You describe things in a very clear manner that really improves the entire story. Good dialogue, very in character, and so on.
But I do have some critiques.
You should space your paragraphs, and always start new dialogue in a new paragraph. Some of us - like me - have to wear glasses and aren\'t the best at focusing. aff.net doesn\'t let us change the font size (which is terrible because when I\'m tired, everything runs together)
There are a few grammar and spelling errors (like \'dieing\' should be dying. The real meaning of \'dieing\' is to cut or stamp material. ^-^), and I suggest having someone beta the story. It would really improve the overall quality.
But I do have some critiques.
You should space your paragraphs, and always start new dialogue in a new paragraph. Some of us - like me - have to wear glasses and aren\'t the best at focusing. aff.net doesn\'t let us change the font size (which is terrible because when I\'m tired, everything runs together)
There are a few grammar and spelling errors (like \'dieing\' should be dying. The real meaning of \'dieing\' is to cut or stamp material. ^-^), and I suggest having someone beta the story. It would really improve the overall quality.