rate_review Reviews

This fic has so much potential in it. The hottest red head pairing ever, a very intriguing storyline full of possibilities, yet... The practical side falls flat on its rear. The characters are filled with OOCness and their names are spelled in a way not entirely unlike \"pin the tail on the donkey\"-keyboard version. In fact, your spelling on the whole would benefit greatly from a basic spell check and as a writer you\'d do well to acquire a strong beta who knows the series inside-out and wouldn\'t be afraid to tell you when you\'re straying.

Umm...I like it so far, even if they are a bit OOC. I hope you\'re going to continue it. There were typoes and punctuation errors, but the fic was still perfectly understandable, so they don\'t matter too much. :)

Actually, it isnt spelled Kougaji either. its Kougaiji. I realize I made some mistakes..and I know im not supposed to put in my own review into my story, but I wanted to let you know that this was a roleplay on Aol instant messenger with another friend as well. But thank you for the feedback and the constructive critisizm. ^^

*Laughs* Dude, her name is Yaone, not Ya O \'ne or however the hell you spelled it, lol! And they\'re OOC, just so you know. You\'re turning them into women, here!

*Rolls her eyes* I know how it\'s spelled; my keyboards busted, twit. I spelled it right the second time, as you saw. *Chuckles* I\'m using an on-screen keyboard, which is pissing me off royally because of all the typos. Don\'t take this as mean, I\'m just pissed at my keyboard, heh.

...Is this going to be continued?

By the way:
Yaone
Lirin
Dokugakuji
Kougaji
(Lol) You also forgot punctuation here and there, and Kougaiji seems too submissive to me. I loved it, otherwise. *Winks*

I always wanted a Gojyo-Kogaiji fic, even if it would make no sense from a canon perspective. Thank you for this, I really enjoyed it.