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Stop reading after Chapter 27 if you're reading this for the smut. There's steamy tension or full on smut in almost every chapter up until that point, then just about none afterthat, with no warning from the author. Learn from my mistake by continuing to read... Even if you're not here for just the smut, the rest of the fanfic is not worth it (falls into the trap of dragging on, OC's overstaying their welcome and dominating the story, the characterization for the main cast suffers to the point they're not recognizable)  

And to vent, there's no resolution or satisfying closures between Manji, Rin or Anotsu...so after everything's said and done, you want to beat your head in feeling led on, thinking that slogging through all that nonsense is gonna reward you...but it won't. Like at ALL. You'll be wondering why you were still reading and what the hell the author was thinking. But before that that nonsense, you get dozens of chapters of well-characterized and well-written hotness. Want to read a version without the AFF formating issues? Then check it out on mediaminer!

no more? T_T Love your story. marathon through it.

I hope you don't take this as a flame but hard critiquing. I admire your effort in this fanfic writing, but I have noticed a lot of problems in reading your fic and even mistakes. One that really irked me is your choice of words. I know you use a lot of big words but many didn't fit with the sentence on what you are trying to describe when writing a particular situation and did not seem to get your point across. It made it difficult to get your point across and it seems you used a thesaurus and picked a nice big word to use in your writing when the word itself didn't seem to fit in the sentence and made the reading awkward. You should always look up the definition of the word before using it if you are not certain of its meaning, cause some of the words you used did not fit. Another thing is it is not always wise to use big words if you want your reader to understand what you are writing. Not many people these days use big words all the time when they talk. True it is good to use such words at times when writing, but over doing it gets annoyingly tedious and difficult for the reader to follow what you mean in your writing. I praise you in your research on Japanese culture. Found mistakes on the seasons and what plant or flower grows during a time actually wouldn't, but that's me nit picking, I know you are trying to be realistic and I give you much kuddos~! :3 Another thing is the dragging on. It seemed to be dragging on and on and made me lose interest. I kept on reading but it didn't seem to go anywhere in my opinion. The new characters you added that is certainly your own creation made me want to laugh, I couldn't take them seriously in seeing they could possibly be apart of the BOTI, they didn't seem very strong to me and it just didn't seem to fit. With them entering in the story I very much lost interest, they just didn't seem strong enough characters to me. And their involvement with Manji and Rin just didn't seem to fit either or even what happened after in what they did to Manji if I remember correctly, I could be wrong. But I again praise you for your ideas and creativity. I guess I'm just one of those who don't follow along with the crowd. The story turned out good in the beginning, but then you seemed to lose your touch as you went further into the story and where I lost interest. The on going teasing of Rin and Manji sexually being together got annoying and it dragged way to long as well. Just the same thing with them in each chapter, Manji frustrated, tease, sexually wants Rin but doesn't for her sake but almost does! on and on that it just wasn't much of interest or surprise and was just frustratingly needless repetition that was quite irritating. You need work on your writing but still who doesn't? I know I need work on my writing and still continue to do so. Since English is my second language, I know how difficult writing can be but practice makes perfect! :D I write fanfics to improve my writing only, I'm not much of writing fanfics and never wanted to until I realized it would help with my writing and grammar and I have noticed I have improved over time. And I'm sure it will do that for you. I can't remember all of your story, hence, what happens to me with a story I lose interest in and I'm not trying to be rude or anything, but its just how I am. I'll try reading it again and try finishing it, but I can't guarantee anything cause I'm like this with any writing I come across that I lose interest in. >_> All in all, keep up your writing and hopefully you will become better than you were before. If you like, I can share some input and even show you some writings I have done and is still continuing to work on. I can't say they are great, cause they are rough drafts or just my practice work and even my first fanfics I have done which I think are god awful. But eh, got to start terrible to get better. ;3

Sorry for the long review and I hope to see a reply to it maybe?

With much ado~

Perire Animus

I just really wanted to say how much I love this fic. It's very well written and even though it's no longer conforming too closely with the source material, it's really gone out of its way to continue a compelling story with excellent characterization and plotting. I cannot wait for more.

Hi there, Please don't stop writing this story! It's incredible! I've been following you since 2007 and hope that you won't leave this undone, since I have yet to read such a fascinating, well written story on a site like this.

I'm loving the fic usually I don't find BOTI fics and the ones I found are not very good but your is truly one of the best fics I read ever.
I love BOTI and I found really admirable that you was able to keep the chacteres true to their personalitys and with soo many details as the japanese names... You writing is really amazing! So I ask you please keep writing this fic I really wanna see what will happen now. xD
Oh I'm from Brazil so forgive any mistakes I may have made in this review.
Kisses

I'm only on chapter 2, but this is such a great story, I have to review right now. The way you write Rin, her inexperience, her puzzling things out, is just so heartbreakingly true. And poor Manji!

Ah!!! You're torturing me! I finished this story in 3 days, have checked this page everday since, and your blog too! I simply love your writing, it just sucks me into the story! I've read your latest chapter on your blog and am excited to read more of Manji's point of view...but it's their reunion I am just dying to get to!!! ManjixRin forever definitely! More chapters soon, onegai! :3

Oh I can't tell you how glad that you kept this story going as long as it is! This series is very dear to my heart and I'm appalled at how little recognition it gets! Please keep writing, you have an amazing style that just draws me in! and the fact that I get to read about our fav Yojimbo smexin' it up!

Hi.
This is the bet fanfiction about Blade that I ever read. But now, I can't wait to read abaout Manji and Rin meeting again. And what Aoshi is doing back? Please don't leave this story unfinished. You are doing a great work here.