rate_review Reviews

great story so far and love to see Eiri in a different and caring position, It was unbelievable great reading a submissive Eiri and a Seme Shuichi. You also describes everything so well and made sure to let us know what was going thru Eiris mind all the way thru - excellent story cant wait to read more. (Is there a chance of this fic being done from shuichi's pov? Would like to see that very much)

First I want to apologize for not reviewing each of the chapters....I found I couldn't stop reading long enough to comment. Your story is absolutely amazing. I had often wondered after reading the manga and seeing the anime, whether Yuki knew just how far Taki had gone. I often thought he hadn't known. Your story was so well written I felt it was a missing chapter to the series. The way you portrayed a sensitive side to Yuki was perfect. I was wondering if you would make him overly sensitive which would have detracted from his origianl aloof character but you didn't.

When you switched the roles and had Shuichi become the seme I was really surprised. I had never pictured Shuichi to want to play that part. However the way you weaved the story so well it fit. I can sort of relate to Shuichi and it made me sit back and think. You were absolutely right to have him work his emotions out that way.

There was one minor distraction I noticed and I almost feel guilty writing about it as your story was so incredible, however I found that your use of the word "leant" was really distracting. I think you meant to use the word leaned. But like I said this story was so amazing I feel bad about commenting.

I also believe that the ending was perfect. You are right to have stopped it there and your reasoning was fine. Even if you had written Shuichi's confession perfectly, I think the darkness in it would have detracted from the entire story. There were times I was so moved by your writing I was brought to tears.

You are an excellent writer and I can't wait to read more of your works.

PS: I have to agree with the aove review of OMG HE HUMMED!!!!! I completely lost it when he did that. I was reading this in the living room with my roommate and I told her about it and since then I have been wondering if that actually works. I never thought about that and I am really curious to know if that would really cause that much feeling.....but yes I believe that was my favorite part of the story.

Thanks im gonna die now....ugh. please write more

Gah! Cliff hanger.
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I can't want until you update this again. Keep up the awesome work.
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hello great story very well thought out and i think ur right if u leave it here we can kind of think of our own way that it ended ya know very smart place to end i think the others that wanted you to continue the story was b/c they loved it so much they just had to ask i mean even i'm tempted to ask but alas a good writer must know when to end the story so that it's a good story not a run on. I mean we read stories to escape for a little bit not live through events that happen to us. Thats one of my problems ending one of my stories i write stories for my class newspaper i write little one-shots of romance horror but mstly up beat one i think i've only written one comedy one that one crashed and burned ah but i'm rambling well anyway good story I loved it it reminded me of the silent seduction part in the tango i love that part well thanks for posting it good luck w/ ur other stories.
-Ellie

That was a great piece and a perfect ending to the story.

AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That's so cute! ^_^ Poor Shuichi. *Huggles Shuichi* Lovely fic :)

This was so sweet and cute! I loved it so much!


I think my favorite part included the line about the demented marshmallow. He really was ridiculous in that adorable way.

Wonderful! Perfect ending.