rate_review Reviews

beautiful.

Woo!!

wow. I've never thought of it that way. I actually like that point of view. It makes the seconf time they did it make a little more sense. That was really good.

YAAAAAAAAAY!! DEE LOVES RYO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Wait...
Why didn't you make them have sex?
Sure, the foreplay's the hottest part if you do it just right, but still...
It'd've been better with some full-on dirty-dirty.
I LOVE this story, though.
REEEEEEEEALLY hot.
Course, I've only read the first three books.
My sister won't fuckin keep her promise and order the rest of the series for me...
Stupid bitch...
Uhh, anyway, back to happy. This is some of the BEST fanfiction wrting I've read, like, ever.
You actually tell it like it's your own, and you're trying to get published.
I hate it when people put crap that doesn't make any sense up.
Oh well...
Gotta go.
Toodles!!

eh? i don\'t remember dee ever saying something about not being able to not walk....of corse i don\'t read the american versions so something could have been said. ohhh...the american version...shudder...good work i enjoyed it emensly

I LOVE YOU WAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! this was writin so well usually pov lemons are extremly bad but this is a prim example of a very well done pov lemon THANK YOU,YOU JUST MADE MY DAY WAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I adore Fake and was very please to find a \"First time\" Fic. You conveyed such a wonderful sense of emotion and eroticism. They did just enough to bond closer to each other. Yet they did not go too far as to put a strain on their newly awakened sexual relationship. Bravo!

oh my god... I don\'t know what to say... I\'m gonna need an enormous beach towel and a cold shower after reading this... SHIT! THAT WAS HOT! I normally don\'t find first person all that creative, but this was so amazingliy written it worked beyond all I could ever imagine! you are amazing! bravo! WOW! I really don\'t feel this review will do and can\'t say enough of how impressed I am! anyway! I \'m gonna go cry now, don\'t know if I\'ll ever find anything so amazingly written as this! \'k bye!

That was so sweet! Excellent job!!!

I agree, I also think you should do another one for their second time. This was very good, well written, and realistic. Great job!