rate_review Reviews

wow. u got the characters like bang on man (the gravi char, iv never read Fake although now im interested). the story lost momentum after yuki's fantasy/dream there for a bit, but at that point u had me hooked. im glad u put the Fake exerpt stuff back into the chapters, the story prolly would have seemed a bit hollow there otherwise. pls pls pls continue to update, i really want to find out how this is resolved.

wow that was pro but y hasn't Yuki told Shuichi that he is his lover yet GAH stupid Yuki! PLEZ UPDATE SOON PLEZ

ok, I have now read the whole thing. I have been at this for days and am so depressed i cant stand it ( I am not kidding) you must , must tell Shu and yuki and get them together and soon i cant stand all the angst. I am about out of my mind. When I read the part about yuki at the hospital i just sat and read and cried for hours. My mental state is getting about as crazy as some of these characters. This is great writing! But please, please give me a break and get my guys together and soon. Really Soon! please! by the way you are as good as the original story line if not better, except a little more angst in yours.Your doing a really good job.

*little girly voice* *CRIES* please you are tearing my heart apart i had not cried in 5 years and your damn story made me cry PLEASE end this torture i beg of you *switch personalities* *low dangerous voice* you either finish it or i'll come by your house and slice your pretty little neck got that??

First off: it's a joy to read a story even a copyeditor would have a hard time complaining about.

Second, after reading the first few chapters of a now ... what? 140,000 word novel? I went to your author site and read your other, shorter works...except for "For whom the bell tolls." Personal issues with dead Shu/Yuki stories, not a comment on your writing ability. All of those show the same excellence in writing, viewpointing, and especially motivation. Because of that, I trust this story, which I've only just skimmed (very lightly) at this point, but am looking forward to savoring over the next several nights.

I'm actually responding to the whole motivational issue, which you address directly (and very well) in the A/N for this chapter (not to mention a more subtle handling throughout the story).

I had one additional thought: for Yuki, part of the power of Shuichi's love is the utter sincerity of it. (Kitizawa's betrayal of the apparent chemistry between them is the emotional killer of Yuki's youth and what makes him so resistant/distrustful of Shuichi's love.) The last thing he'd want at this point is a love based on anything other than a real emotional/spiritual bond...something like obligation. Shuichi is by nature loyal. If he knew he'd once loved Yuki, he might well feel obliged to try to rekindle that emotion...while being emotionally ravaged by his extant feelings for Annette.

It's a magnificent quandry you've created---both for Yuki and (eventually) for an enlightened Shu.

If Shuichi is nearby and in familiar surroundings, Yuki has two chances for winning him back. One...a complete restoration of memory. Two...a resurgence of the chemistry between them...which obviously still exists...at least to the reader's knowledge, if not Yuki's...as you've made clear in the electric first touch, the lack of desire to dance when Yuki wasn't there, and a dozen other excellent setup moments. Both of these could restore the very real love he had before. Anything else...especially a karmicly loaded revelation...might well get him Shuichi's body without Shuichi's soul.

So...Keep it up. I'm looking forward to how you resolve this...

Just as long as you /do/ resolve it! I saw that "archive" message at the top and thought maybe chap 30 was all we were going to get! /That/ my dear, /would/ warrant a flame! :D

two thumbs up.

Hooray! Another update! It's sad seeing things from Hiro perspective...maybe because that really sets the situation in stone as to how coldly realistic they're forced to be about this

I have to say this story still has my full attentin. Even from the moment I started reading it. It's nicely written and you've done an excellent job with the personailities and emotions of the characters with the situation they are in. I am anxious to read what happens in the next update.

WELCOME BACK!!!!!!!!!!!!! i missed yer updates sooooooo much! i checked back alll the time lol i hope you had a great christmas, stuffed yer face, and will b having left overs for 2 weeks after hehe! ne ways! ty 4 the great story! i swear i would b sooo bored without it *sighs* i need a new life... :p byeeeee

**mandi**

Great chapter please keep going I like how you add the conversation that would happen if Shuichi still had the memories of Yuki...I think of all the people to tell him it would be Hiro, what are best friends for right....thank-you for posting...