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Update...update...update...

excellent first chap, new twist, and loved the way you let us know what each was thinking, took us through the motions

chap 2, great and I didn\'t mind it in the alley, like that serena is NOT a ditz and personally I do think it has plot and a lot of emotion

Yay! Yay! Update! Update! Its gettin\' real good!

Um, I\'m glad you have time to write other stories, but \"Mine\" (Possesion Series, Rurouni Kenshin) was put on hold because of technical problems. I assume this fic was not on the same site as Mine, or it has higher priority than it. I hope you didn\'t discontinue it, and if you did, I hope you alert us. I was considering putting this review on Mine, but I was afraid you wouldn\'t check it.

Just checked a site to make sure I was correct, and here it is:
\"Age of consent for sexual activity: The Article 177 of the Penal Code puts the age of consent for sexual actitvity at thirteen (13) years.\"
from this site: http://www.interpol.int/Public/Children/SexualAbuse/NationalLaws/csaJapan.asp
*coughs* O_o; Damn, that\'s young!

Excellent story! There are just a couple of inconsistancies in chapter 4 which throws off most of the chapter\'s plot and inevitably messes with chapter 5. Mamoru already knew that Usagi knew his identity and had previously taken off his mask. Sorry if this has already been mentioned!

Eep, nevermind about inevitably messing up chapter five. Seems you\'ve already caught your mistake! Will you be uploading the new version of chapter four?

Well, even more interesting. And yes, that\'s definitely Kenji! By the by, I know, from various refferences in Japanese Anime, Manga, and, um, \"special\" games that Japanese law permits marriage at age 16, so I always presumed that the age of consent was the same. You might want to look into your facts before accepting that 14 is the age of consent there. Just saying.

I feel really really awful for being nitpicky but right after Usagi finds out Mamoru is worried about her being a minor in the earlier chapters, she mentions (to herself) that she\'s turning 16 in three days and that\'s what seemed to set her into following him but in chapter five during her spiel of imformation about herself she says she\'s turning sixteen in two months. And she\'s already told Mamoru about her family\'s names but that\'s something that could be the fault of Mamoru\'s memory.

I\'m really really sorry for over-analyzing the small details of your story and annyoingly spamming up your comments to tell you about them. But consistancy is good for the soul?