rate_review Reviews

That was brilliant. I can completely see that entire scenario playing out in front of my mind's eye! I do hope you will turn this into a multi-chaptered fic. There aren't enough good Raito/L yaoi fics to go around.

That was totally hot and really well written. You really have to write more of this!

More please! I can\'t wait to see what L does.

Okay. There are authors I reeeeeally don\'t like. Even despite the fact that I like the way they write. I really don\'t like when authors stop updating. ^^\' So basically... I mean, I see that the story is new, but I am already afraid that you\'ll become \"tired of the story and blahblahblah\".

I can\'t criticize much since there is only one chapter published. Besides, if I criticize, you will definitely run away screaming. ^^ Oh, no, just kidding. The only thing I can see for now is that you are new to fanfiction, but I am sure you\'ll improve your style with time. :) I mean, I think you might be a nice fanfiction writer. If you write stuff. ^^

Oh, and about the summary? Is it LRaito or RaitoL? It\'s very important for me since I like LRaito better. ^^\' In the description you have LRaito, but in the summary you write RaitoL. And so, uh, I am confused. 0__o

Waiii! !
Goody! !
I don\'t really like Misa but if it helps the plot. .
Well L! ! Go Get Raito Already !
Yey !

Greetz!

Wow, that was amazing. As a compliment I\'d have to say there\'s hardly anything to comment on. But as you said, contructive critisizm does help, so I\'ll give you a little. You didn\'t quite capture L\'s personality, though it was close. I could see the immediate difference in character, but then again, I could see why he wouldn\'t act the same given the circumstances. But other then that, I couldn\'t really find anything wrong with it. Keep up the good work. But I\'m wondering, are you going to continue this in the same story, or create a seperate one? Or none at all. Author\'s seem to be doing that lately.....something about ruining the fic. I don\'t know. Sorry, I\'m rambling again.

This story was very well-written and hot to read. However, because of how your summary was written \"...This leads the young detective to agressively claim Raito as his and his alone,\" I ended up feeling disappointed because I thought finally someone had written an L on top story, and it turned out to be an L alone story instead. I would consider rewording your summary, because your premise is really fun, just not accurately described.