rate_review Reviews

I'm glad I finally read this. A great pairing; and I like the way it resolved ... or didn't. I have a feeling that Hakkai and Kougaiji might be trysting again :-)

That was very well written. I liked the ending about the legend and I thought the part with Kougaiji throwing rocks at the 'poor innocent animals' was funny. Bad Kougaji! *thwacks* I can only imagen how many times someone has fucked him in his sleep. ^.^

Are you going to write a sequel for this? Even though the pairing wasn't what I expected, I loved it. And I wish that you will write a seqel to it. I wanna know what happens to them.

I liked it. I liked it! Never read this pairing before. Great job!

Damn this was hot.

YAY wonderful job. Kou throwing rocks at dragons and almost getting his ass kicked cuz he\'s doing it. Great. The line about watching a loved one out of sight was a great tag line. And Hakkai realising that anyone he\'s ever screwed, he\'s fallen in love with is a nice touch...it shows that he really doesn\'t have causal sex like Gojyo has, but finds the act of sex closer to a true expression of love than lust. Maybe I\'m reading too much into it? Either way, it was a nice touch.

I\'ve really enjoyed this set! Surprisingly- because that\'s not a pairing I\'d have thought of. Nevertheless- VERY well done!!!!

Thanks for sharing!!!!

This is the first Hakkai/Kou story that I\'ve read (come to think of it, ARE there any other K/H stories??), and I absolutely LOVE it! You write wonderfully. I have to say, the hopeless romantic in me reeeeeeeeeeeeally wants to see this turn out to be more than a one night stand *sigh* I hope you\'ll continue this one, I think you really have a gem here.

Very interesting. I\'m curioius about the ideas you advanced, about youkai body chemistry, so I really want to see what you do with this. Keep it up!

not bad. i\'m interested.

you do have a great vocabulary, but i think it was overused a little in the beginning part before Hakkai finds the cave. example: \"Jeep was inscessantly making squealing sounds of protest.\" \"Incessantly\" and \"squealing sounds fo protest\" are both great words/phrases but using them together is bit overkill. you have quite a few great descriptive phrases but sometimes they seem awkwardly stuck in. but you are definately on the right literary track.

i like how animated Hakryuu is. he is one of my favorite characters and i am glad to see that you bring such life to him.

when you write someone else\'s character it\'s like watching an actor take on the roll; you watch intently hoping that the actor will do the character justice. you want the performance to be believable. i love Hakkai, as i do all the Saiyuki boys, but i find that his personality is hardest to nail down. that is perhaps part of who he is (as you say he easily becomes \"wallpaper\" ). i think you have made a very believable Hakkai. you have taken on the roll and it\'s working.

Kougaiji, i\'m not overly sure about. i have not scrutinized his character from the manga/anime as much yet, so i am not sure how well he\'s being \"played\". but i can say that i do like what i see. i think you\'ve written him very sexy so far and i like it. i love your use of the sense of smell. and Kou\'s teasing claws along Hakkai\'s thigh . i have a clear image of Kou leaning into Hakkai nuzzling his neck and dragging his claws over Hakkai\'s thigh - \" \'Hmm,” Kougaji moaned, “I like the way you smell.\' \" < i shiver again>. this was a great line. so seductive.

And the conversation that Kou and Hakkai have about Gojyo and Doku was great. i like how you had them talk around the subject of them being the brothers\' lovers. it was intelligent, playful and tension building. it was good how Hakkai showed an initial caution in resonding to Kou. you left it at a cliff hanger, but i am hoping that Hakkai\'s question of response will be answered with a sexy move of his own.

i am hoping that Kou continues to be the agressor, but that Hakkai\'s response is more than willing. i definately want to see how this goes. i hope that you finish this fic (great name BTW) and continue practicing your writing skills.