rate_review Reviews

...Horrible. You suck. You have crappy writing skills. Work harder. Get your mind to work as well. Your fic just sucks as much as all those supposed-to-be good ones. Crap. Terrible. Horrid. Appalling. Need I say more? *holds up magnum to side of self's head, pulls trigger* BANG! *body falls down dead*
Ghost self: Yoouuuuuuuuuuuu suuuuuuuuuuucccccccckkkkk! Ooooooooooo!

wow

Hmmm, what to say? Oh, I know! Two words. YOU. FAIL. 1) The script format makes me want to claw my eyes out. 2) You obviously have no experience writing sexual fanfiction, because the description was just awful. 3) Sex is not just about "Fuck me, fuck me!" It's supposed to be a special union between two people who are in love, not just "Oh, I feel like having sex with you" at some random moment. With some MAJOR work, this could be an enjoyable fanfic, but until you revamp it, please remove it and do not publish anything like it until your writing skills improve.

Not bad! This may sound strange, but I like they way you you kept it simple with a short introduction and got it done fast. I mean, long stories are good, but sometimes you just want to get to the good part without too much scrolling, you know? Anyway, well written and to the point, I give it a 5!

This is supposed to be a story? How this piece of crap can be called a story is beyond me! The grammar in this is so bad it's like it was written by a 3 year old! Bottom line, this story is gay, just like you!

well, it's an ok story, but you need to correct your spelling, and try to describe the scenes a little more.

What the hell? That wasn\'t sexy or erotic or naything. Looked more like a badly written troll to me.

This fic really needs to be proofread. The grammar leaves much to be desired and there are plenty of typos. The fic itself didn\'t make much sense, but I can\'t help but think that if it was written with complete, proper sentences and complete, proper paragraphs it might have.

watever

alright this is a flame...and its magnesium so theres no hope of extinguishing it. alright number 1. script style is really bad in fan fics, no one likes it. number 2. explain to me how i ended up in a section of this site where ash gets raped by pokemon...? anyways number 3. do something popular like harry potter or teen titans fan fics, pokeman is a little freaky...4. misty seems a bit anxious to fuck ash...i mean normally virgins are nervous...thats kind of weird