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Your build-up is very, utterly kickass. The mixing of what one presents and what one does when it comes to HAWTNESS was damn good too. AND VIDEO GAME PR0N YAYZ

Fic rocked, character description especially awesome. Await next chapter so I can UNF UNF UNF

Good start. Exponential buildup -- slow at first, gets faster as it proceeds until it\'s climbing faster than the reader keeps up; this is good for eliciting excitement. A little confusing between the first scene shift; has time changed? We know it has, but I had to reread it. Maybe just a little (earlier) by the ***. Should be interesting to see where this goes. I think you\'ll have to cool it back off quite a bit unless the story ends up being only a little longer than chapter 1 en masse. Is this what the manga morphed into, or is that an entirely seperate project? I\'d have to assume yes, as they are so similar. Very nice start. You\'re most eloquent with your words, unsurprising for skittlesama, but I cringed a few times at the technical details. I\'ll rub that off as the offense I take when I hear other real technicians doing support, and so receive it well that Izzy has rubbed my fur the wrong way with his technical advisories.

Oooh, PLEASE hurry and continue! ^_^ It\'s wonderfully-written and the scenario\'s so ridiculous that it makes sense! =-P haha That\'s great---never would\'ve thought of THAT, but it\'s still great. Please, though, for all that is holy, continue! Although I never would\'ve thought of the 2 as a pair, I like Izzy and feel that his character doesn\'t get enough attention, so please hurry! ^,~

XD!

I wondered how you\'d use that idea...And Now I Know.

Great job with the fic [ as always ]

Yolei. Likes. Videogame. PORN! XD Good job! I\'d love to see how their relationship progresses. I never thought I\'d like the Kouyako pairing, but this is really good! Keep going! :D

Good start, hon. I think you\'ve handled things you were worried about rather nicely. Let me know when you post next; I\'m interested to see where this goes.

Nice story.

Nice story.