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for Shadows of the mind

by Queerbee

person Scorpinac
schedule November 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting use of her healing powers. I noticed, though, that you made a few tiny mistakes, such as \"She\'s in the the library with Hotaru,\", when you clearly meant to write, \"She\'s in the library with Michiru.\". Well, I look forward to the next entry. Laters!
person Blueblazer (Not log in)
schedule November 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story getting a little creepy by each chapter
person cheesypuff
schedule November 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great story you need to hurry and update. I want some cheesypuff. well anyways please continue and update soon.
person blackdestiny
schedule November 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hell ya you have got to update soon we want to find out what happen. please continue with this story and hurry update soon. What is Ami huh huh??
person Anon
schedule November 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
you very good at what you do my friend. you do more yeah? keep it coming my frien.
person An enthusiatic writter
schedule November 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I am a writter on this website as well. The punctuations a lil messed up but its some good stuff. You have the ominous appeal that people such as myself stride for. Keep it up.
person blackdestiny
schedule November 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I have to agree about the punction but that can be improved great story please continue soon don\'t let your reader wait forever. We want to read more. So please update soon.
person Scorpinac
schedule November 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
So, whatever \"They\" are, they\'re also after Rini, huh? Interesting... Do continue as soon as you can! Laters!
person Anon
schedule November 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hmm, this chapter feels abruptly cut off. Are you sure it fully uploaded? THa taside, interesting. Abuse, or possession? Assault, or self-inflicted? Innocent, or insane? The questions mount... I look forward to the next installment. Laters.
person Anon
schedule November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
AU, I see. Umm, how old is Hotaru supposed to be in this story, just out of curiosity? It would help the set up. Oh, and your punctuation skills could use a little fine tuning, just so you know(noticed a few missing commas and at least one near the front that was simply misplaced.). Laters.

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