rate_review Reviews

i love it. i love that you had akito have at least some humanity. i hate it when people write about him as if he were a monster. write more soon!!!!!!!!

Wow...just, wow...how's Akito going to last against the charm of the cat? (despite being the outcast, kyo is my fav. character). Hope you update soon! baibai!

Much better but something I forgot to mention, Sohma, not Shoma, (I looked it up, Shoma isn't even a Japanese word). But the Spelling and grammer are much better. A word from one auther to another, all good writers reread thier work because it's better if you catch the mistakes before other people do.

-Talia

what? nooooo! do keep writing!! I\'m a fan of Akito/Kyo! I like how this starts out more realistically, with Kyo hating Akito-- and you made a good point with how both Akito and Kyo are isolated from the Sohma family -- So please do keep writing... I want to see how Akito finally gets Kyo...!

You need to reread or get a bata for your story. it\'s so good but the spelling and grammer errors make me cry (figuritively). good decription, good character portrayal, just... gah... the spelling!and your Japanese is wrong. sumimasen- meanings: pardon me, excuse me, I\'m sorry, Thank you, you\'re welcome (I love Japanese, don\'t you?) I\'m currently taking Japanese so I\'d be willing to give you the proper meanings for the words. Oh yeah, Shoji= doors, Shojo= girl-oriented media (manga or anime). Some of your sentence structure is odd or repetive. (eg. My knees bruse from having my weight centered on my knees and the hard floor.) Again, It would be best if you reread you work. I\'m only telling you all of this because under the few mistakes is a phenominal story. I hope my suggestions helped.

-Talia

PS. I made a mistake, it\'s shogi, not shoji. Gomen nasai. Oh, yeah, if you\'re basing this off the manga, Akito\'s a girl.

i dont know why but i really enjoy relastionships that would be hard to imagine like akito/kyo i love that paring!!!!!

Hey this is interesting. please continue. I wonder what\'s going to happen next, well, I think I have an idea. But anyhow, update soon.

-BDen