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November 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice start so far, but I think it needs a little more to bring it out. Up-date soon.
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November 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Despite the OOC, This is a fantastic story. It really feels like what it\'d be like to come back after being gone two years, and you do a great job of explaining what\'s been going on. I look forward to future chapters.
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November 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is reaaly good. I can understand why SHinji had to leave all of a sudden. There\'s only so much crap a person can take before they snap.
It\'s good that you added Kensuke into this fic. He doesn\'t get enough exposure. Pilot of Unit-5 and friend/co-worker to Asuka. I would like to see the Asuka/Kensuke/Rei freindship dynamics.
Keep it Up.
It\'s good that you added Kensuke into this fic. He doesn\'t get enough exposure. Pilot of Unit-5 and friend/co-worker to Asuka. I would like to see the Asuka/Kensuke/Rei freindship dynamics.
Keep it Up.
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November 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this sucks. really hard.
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November 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, it was written alright but it\'s really not any different than all of the first chapters or Shinji returns chapters I\'ve read. To be honestly, it was very good for a first time but, ususally, Shinji return/Angels attacking again stories kind of always fall short if you know what I mean. Add the fact that you have already stated the parings and you really have your work cut out for you on this one. I\'ll comment on the relationships when you get that far though.
Nothing against you personally but the whole chapter was, like I said above, just a big \'Shinji\'s back!\' chapter. The good thing about this is that you got that out of the way and your writing is pretty good for someone who is writing their first story. What I\'m not to sure about is how you are going to establish the links from the present characters (Blunt Shinji) to the old characters (Shy Shinji). I\'ll give a better review later after I read a chapter or two but I seriously wish you good luck. Stories like these are some of the hardest to make work.
Nothing against you personally but the whole chapter was, like I said above, just a big \'Shinji\'s back!\' chapter. The good thing about this is that you got that out of the way and your writing is pretty good for someone who is writing their first story. What I\'m not to sure about is how you are going to establish the links from the present characters (Blunt Shinji) to the old characters (Shy Shinji). I\'ll give a better review later after I read a chapter or two but I seriously wish you good luck. Stories like these are some of the hardest to make work.