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WHEEEEE! Yep yep. you're grammer sucks onii-chan. Damn you! Now i want to go read more Gravitation fics!


Oh, wait till you check out this awesome new story where you get to have wild & hot & steamy & *kinky* sex with the beautiful.......

LOVE IT!! Yuki caring for Shu-chan is always what i want to see. Will you write a second chap. maybe one that has Yuki w/ the nightmares and Shu0chan caring like always but then the nightmare turns out to acutully happen. Keep writen 'kay. (i'm also from the south. From the boarder line of Kentucky and Indiana.)

Thank goodness for OOC Yuki... I\'m curious now, although I could use a little more detail outside of the dreams about Shuuichi\'s reactions, especially since this seems to be from his perspective.

this was a really good start to your story, (poor shuichi though)! I hope you keep writing and get the next part out soon!! *crosses fingers* ^_^

aw that was so sweet. i really like it so far
you gotta update
since i write stories with blood in them too, i definately like this one
OH YEAH YOU ROCK!!
hahahahahahahahahaha
FUN TIMES! YIPPIE!
lol im sucha moron.
but i love your fic
update soon

I like it - a good start. It just seems as though something is missing. \"You may be wondering why Yuki cares so much? Because he’s been through this many times before. And he knows it’s not fun.\" Been through what? Shu\'s nightmares? His own sleepless nights? Night terrors? Reliving the past? What? I\'m left with more questions than I started out with. It will be interesting to see where this is going.
Koneko

It is good please keep going would love to read more....

Interesting start... you did a great job describing the scenes, I could really see it. You had quite a few verb tense errors and you seemed to be leaving out words in some sentences.

2nd paragaph: His was bleeding, and his bruised. (verb tense and missing word)
1st paragraph after \"break\" - He was broke out in a cold sweat and his hair was tussled and stuck to his forehead. (doesn\'t quite make sense)

Thats just a few of the errors that jumped out at me. A beta would probablly help a lot with these types of problems. Thanks for posting - looking forward to the next chapter!

AWESOME-NESS!! Well Not Shu\'s nightmares O.o;; but Yuki being all fluffy is ^^ I love this so far! The end of the chapter t\'was cute ness! I can\'t wait till the next chapter, lease update soon!

KUDOS!

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