rate_review Reviews

A good start here. ^^ It's nice to see some more fanfiction for this series out there... so many things are unresolved! You asked for comments... I for one would like to see Takaya and Naoe work out whatever's between them, for better or worse, like adults instead of jealous, lonely children... but that may be too much to ask of any fic, lol. You may use the "dreamscape" as an avenue for that resolution... and some yummy smut. ^^ Of course, I'm pretty much making this up as I type, so feel free to ignore me. Otherwise... it's well written (grats!) and you've got a good feel for the characters. Nice work.

You know, I have the same problem - too much plot, not enough characterization. I wind up jumping straight into the story with no warning and going way too fast, not even bothering to describe what people look like or anything. But there\'s nothing wrong with this story - you\'re doing very well! I really like this and want to see where you\'ll go with it. I loved the way you wrote about Takaya\'s thoughts on Naoe\'s clothes and politeness. He really is a spolied little brat sometimes...well always. Please keep going - I can\'t wait to see what else will happen!

OMG! i\'m in love. I love how you keep them so in character. I really hope you do more with this.

This is good - keep going, please! Umm ... I don\'t know where you should go with it either, but I know that I don\'t want you to stop, if that helps ... I guess it doesn\'t though, huh?