rate_review Reviews

hands down, this is the one of the best stories on the website so far. make sure the ending is up to par. great work!

It's a nice start but the plot could use some more conflict to make it more interesting. And to help establish you could say how old they are now or how long it has been sence after the end of the series. With Davis owning that buisness makes it sound like they are adults now.

As for grammer you should use quotation marks for when people are speaking and start on a new line for each peice of dialog.

Pimped, as always... You shuld, like read my stuff too.