rate_review Reviews

make more chapters

b

keep it coming

To answer your quetion the others are going to be looking for Ash and run into their own trouble. If anyone wants sex I'm sorry I'm not good on writing that, so I stick to wrighting what I'm good with dark adventure stories.

Still kinda lost but overall good

one word says it all: damn! question: what happened to the others?

Wow this story sucks. It has lack of grammatical coherency, lack of any even slightly interesting plot developement, and it seems like the characters were just thrown together, like you are just trying to live out your personal fantasies on paper, while not explaining the background. Basically, it sucked, and noone will write a background story for this when it is as horrible as it is.

Either stop writing, or get better.

PS- there isnt even any sex you moron

this story has piked my interest. i hope you update soon!