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Great job. Keiki be jealous to Shouri.... its very nice. I hope what you continue to write with some sorts of things. Wait for the next chapter.

First off, I wanna say This is a really good story, I love it so much. So many fics for this series are quite lacking, it's very hard to find one I can really enjoy. As for your virgin problem, I can see why it would be, but I've also noticed alot of fanfic authors don't mention the blood, and you did say ttend to, but it's not always that way, some don't bleed their first time, a few of my friends that have already had sex didn't. So, Youko could be one of those girls who doesn't bleed the first time. It's not a sure thing, some bleed some don't it's genetics. Hope this helps, keep up the great work, I look forwerd to more. ^^

Yay! I love your fic! I keep returning to see if you've updated it yet! Thank you for writing some 12K fanfiction! Please update soon! : D

a funny chapter~
I want to know whether yoko have feeling to keiki

I am going to love your story. There actually is another 12 Kingdoms fic in the Misc. Anime section, but it is a one shot between Yoko and some made up character. I do believe your's will be great. Keep writing because you have plenty of readers, especially if you give us a truly good lemon here and there too.

good story~
it is natural~and loving

Hi, you have no idée how happy I was when I found your fic! I have been looking everywhere for a good Keiki/Youko fic! I really hope you will write more and soon. I'm sorry to say I won't be able to read any more of this fic in the near future, since I'm going backpacking in Australia but I hope that I will find it finished when I get back so I can spend an afternoon or evening reading the rest of what I'm sure is going to turn out to be a really great fic!

Another lovely chapter, particularly with all of the Yoko/Keiki interaction. You're developing this story at such a wonderful pace that it makes me envious. I'm glad you're taking your time with this story and making it a enjoyable read. I especially like how you are exploring Yoko's thoughts and fears over the possible outcomes and such. It really gives her a great depth and adds to the personality we all saw emerge during the course of the anime. I think you are keeping everyone in character very well and those that walk on the grey lines are justified in their changes. You've got a gift, hun!

I did have a little nit though, since you said you weren't adverse to receiving concrit. No, not spelling so much but the grammar. Almost the entire first half of this chapter uses present-tense and then switches to the more appropriate past-tense in the second half. Just wanted to let you know in case you didn't catch that in particular.

This may seem forward and you obviously don't have to accept, but I would be willing to look over and/or beta for you in the future, especially since I'm becoming so invested in this story. I'm majoring in english and creative writing and have an eye for those sorts of things (plus, I'm slightly obsessive compulsive, but we won't go into that...) Great job, just don't keep your fans (see: ME) waiting too long. ^_~

Write more soon, I love your story, it's so detaled and original, I'm hooked!

I am loving your story so much! I just finished watching the entire "Twelve Kingdoms" anime a couple days ago and love the Youko/Keiki pairing. I also like the fact that you are keeping the characters as they were presnted in the manga/anime. Well done! I hope to see updates soon! One quick question though: the sword Seigu (major sorry if I mispelled it), is it enveloped by a real soul? I personally do not understand the whole concept behind the sword.