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=] I like it so far!

OH my...

Please read this, your story was good, but your grammar/spelling sucks:

When they entered the small place. Shuichi felt two strong arms wrap his slim waist. - Should be one sentence

Their body were touching and both Shuichi and Yuki wanted more contact. - should be 'their bodies were touching'

Yuki took off his and Shuichi’s shirt, their heated body touching one another. - again, 'body' should be changed to 'bodies'

Soft words were being said to each other to their excitement rise. - should be 'said to each other as their excitement rose'

Yuki haven’t left Shuichi took off his boxers which he wanted to be the one to do that to his lover. - should be 'Yuki hadn't left'... plus it doesn't make sense

Shuichi blushed, it has been for too long they were apart and Shuichi felt a bit uncomfortable which made Yuki smile with the sight. - not enough commas and it should be 'it had been far too long'

“you’re so beautiful when you’re blushing,” - needs capitalization

How I know you love me as much as I love you? - should be 'how do i know'

Yuki stared at Shuichi’s plea look and melted with the look Shuichi was sending him, full of love and fear. - should be 'at Shuichi's pleading look'

All along I’ve been in love with you and I didn’t want to admit, the stubbornness didn’t let me and I regret every day for if - should be 'i didn't want to admit it' and the end doesn't make sense

Now was Yuki’s turn to place his hands on Shuichi’s cheeks - 'now it was Yuki's turn'

I can't be fucked to do anymore... oh and 'preciousness' is not another word for cock

Other than that... it was good. I may forgive you if you don't speak english fluently... if you do... then i hope you're underage

Is there going to be more chpts its really good and is Yuki and Shuichi back together for good and did Yuki really mean it when he said he really missed Shu-chan I hope so and is there going to be a lemon between yuki and shu-chan sorry for all the questions I really like the story alot keep up the good work ^-^

It is sooo romantic I love it please keep going would love to read more ty for posting this chapter.....

What happened? Why did they break up in the first place? Did Yuki find someone else? Was he just being an ass? More background, please XD

I really do like ur story and I can not wait for the next chapter. I wanted to ask do this take places at school or something.

please hurry and finish

your story's nice,though im a little confused,were Shuichi and Eiri together before this or what?anyways,can't wait for your next chapter!