rate_review Reviews

Eheheh, we true critics feel your pain. Defects like Anon make us look bad. See, when you're such a loser that you have to cruise around AFF.net writing completely unhelpful reviews just for the sake of being a n00b, normally you WOULD put an Anon in your critic name. If only I had IP banning power... *sighs dreamfully*

Anyhoo, here's my review.

Plenty of potential, oh yes. I feel you could have spread out and built up to Seras' outrage a little. Integra seemed a bit extra bitchy, but not much more than normal, and I'm guessing you were using that in your plot basis anyway right?

Your Alucard seems spot on. Note though that I wouldn't be saying this if you had made him have those thoughts out loud that he was having near the end. I've seen quite a few writers crash their characters straight OOC the same way, so kudos to you ;P

Your detail is above average, try to work on that a little more to achieve perfection. "Detail is divine" ~ Any great artist.

Now, like everybody, (everybody whom counts. (no n00bs)) I will make my plea for you to ignore the n00bs and keep marching forward on this fic. Please-please-please write more, your fic looks soooooo juicy, yes oh yes-yes-yesssss ;P

Ciao,
TEOATGAB

I do not think you should delete your story. I do believe that it could benefit from being formatted a bit differently, it's hard to read without paragraphs, otherwise I feel you should keep at it and only listen to contstructive critizism and those who enjoy your work. Genuine advice should be welcome, but flames are definitely not worth your time.

i like this story just its pretty good i love AxS stories not alot out there...i agree with LunatheLunatic try not to make him too cuddly. oh and dont let ANON get to you, why praise then criticize a story? thats kinda retarted but neways keep it up i like it! ^_^ best wishes- ED :D

Eh... Its not all bad i like it..If someone is messing with ya they can fuck themselfs..Ha I've read some REALY bad fanfic...This an't close to it...Its so so..i like it and keep on reading it.....Keep going dear...If my fic got some bad commits i whould just cry and won't wright anymore for the rest of my life! gah! But i like your stuff! YEAH FUCK OFF HA HAHA HAA HAA...oh god now my fic's going ta get bad reviews epps...*weeps*

Its a ok AxS fic, a nice romance , a little mushy...but i like that for now...its better then the AxS rape fics out there...i'm getting tired of them . Just..don't make Alucard...cuddle...I hate cuddleing Alucards! No more cuddles with the alucard! (After sex cuddles don't count)

oh god i'm ranting forgive..not in the right mind now...GOOD FANFIC MORE MORE

Hey there. Just to say that your story has a good start and as for that ANON think, they can shut their trap. Writing isn't bloody easy and I think that you do have a talent!! I think that you have the potential to write a story that will have people hooked and be waiting eagerly for the next chapter. I know I will. Keep up the good work. And don't keep me waiting for another chapter, because that is just mean. Lotsa possitivness, Razielum. ^_^

Hmmm, this has great potential it just needs a little work. Such as word usage, and just a little more detail. But other then that I really liked it, and enjoyed reading it. I also read your Inuyasha fic and loved that one as well. Please up-date this one soon.
~Symphony~

that waz pretty good keep it up and up date soon

Ignore that Anon, the story is good please continue.

ugh this is a horrible piece of crap. you're terribly untalented. get a beta. better yet, GET SOME TALENT.

i understand what you mean i myself is writting a story i have moments like that if you need any help just reply to this in your next chapter i will conact you