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Great update, Keitaro would have fared better if Toshio had shot him outright rather than what he pulled. Although given how Naru and Motoko reacted, what Kei should do is go spend some quality time with Seta at a dig. Only downside to that would be Shinobu being left behind, but that may wind up being the better option compared to the deep freeze he is experiencing now.

And who doesn't think that Tsuruko isn't going to dump Toshio (especially after breaking his promise by causing mental harm) and hooking up with Keitaro again? I want to see the look on Motoko's face when that happens.

Another great chapter. It didn't take that long either, and you're right about Toshio being cruel. Wish there was an omake though, something like the girls already knew and accepted the fact or didn't care in the first place. Mm .. just my imagination running wild. After all, pretty much noone likes the bad guy if he isn't one himself. ^^

Good work,

DL

Wow. Trully one of the few fanfics i've read that dealt with this type of situation so maturely. I'm new to adultfanfiction so my opinon is based mainly from fanfiction.net, however this is astonding considering i though i was only going to find porn on this site. Excellent and keep up the great work!!

Well, this fic has effectively made the transition from being a sex story to a story with sex in it, if you catch my drift. I must say I really loathe this Toshio character. For most of the chapter, he keeps you guessing whether he is a menacing bully or a good man filled with anger. In the end, his final act solidifies him as a arrogant villain who must think he is some sort of god of vengence, when in reality he is an ass with a screw loose. (Keitaro hardly deserves this)

I'm not sure if this is going to truly be Keitaro/Tsuruko, but I hope Toshio will get his in the end. I usually like to leave it to author's to decide what to do with their own characters, but again, I just can't stand Toshio. In the end, I don't know if this will end up being a story I actually like. But you've got my emotions flared, so I must commend you for your efforts.

Excelent, this is probably one of the best fanfictions I have read in a while, at first I was skepticle but after the second chapter you had me hooked. Keep up the good work and make the next chapter just as interesting or even more so. I will be paitently waiting for the next installment. With good regards Keitarou_chan_naru

Really good chapter.
The tension was intense.
keep writing.

Very nice, this story is so cool I couldn't stop until I finished reading all you had. I find it about as addictive as the aftermath series either I would love to read more of as soon as possible.

woot woot, really emotional, i wonder where ur story will go with this, its totally unpredictable

drama galore! great job dude!

Yeah, that was good payback from Toshio alright. Good chapter. I can't help but think that the inhabitants of Hinata Sou are overreacting, but it's not a "bad writing" sort of overreacting, just the sort that humans typically do. Hopefully Keitaro will think of what to do.