rate_review Reviews

Loved this. Wish it were longer though. I also had some difficulty with the transition from Aya reading to them leaving for Villa Weiss. Other than that...can't wait to find out what happens when the chibis realize that they're gone. I also can't wait to read the next installment of Schu torturing Brad.

Just waiting for the next chapter eagerly :)

Yeah yeah, it's me again.

I'm through it (for now) and loved it. OMG, great lemons and such a marvellous Schuldig. He seemed very cool but I don't think the nasty telepath is satified yet. I don't feel sorry for Crawford at all, though his situation is indeed... pityful. I fel more sorry for Schu. Doing something like that indicates deep hurt >_<

So who won the bet now... Waiting for the next chapter.
Pixie sticks are not standing in that damn dictionnary. >_< But I found out *hrhrhr* (thanks, google) I'd never thought Schu would like that. Fits him. <3

*rises from a faint* Just read Inversion. Oh my gods I've not read a hotter Schu scene, I don't think. That's including the ones I've read of him and Yohji. Well done! *fans self happily*

*sniff* So pretty! I love it when they finally get over themselves and fuck! *applause* Bravo!

Nyo!

Currently reading this story and I can't take my eyes off it though I'm nearly falling assleep. XD I won't make it through the story tonight, so I'll give you another review as soon as I've read all chapters. (Read till chap 15 now @_@)

I love how you let Schuldig speak German 'cos I understand him *giggles*. He really is what I would call a "geile Sau". XD
I am German you know and I'm impressed how you get the grammar. German grammar is not easy.
One thing though: It's "Gott in der Hölle". Without Umlaut it spells "Hoelle", would be more correct than "Holle" for there is a fairy tale called "Frau Holle" and I use to think of that everytime that sexy mindbreaker says that. So if you need evil German swearing or something - contact me and I'll help you out *grin*

What I do like: You brought me to eating pistachio ice cream. I like your Crawford. I like your style and I keep on laughing.
I like the way Schu and Yohji are talking to each other. I like Aya-chan. I really do. And bringing me to like a woman in a shounen-ai story is quite something. XD

What I don't like: Ken is decreased to some enerving childish sidekick. Weiß is more than just Yohji and Aya. They stick together and Ken can be very serious. He's not my fave, but I don't think he's like that.
The songs included disturb me. They fit to the story but I really can't imagine Yohji & co listening to American music - and singing along.

That's all I can think of with my tired brain. These days I'll finish reading and give you a comment to all of these chapies.
In the meantime you could answer me 2 questions by email: What are DT's? Some trembling?
And what's the meaning of "slipping the Seven out of gear" or "wrapping the Seven around" or "wrecking the Seven" and so on. I desperatly looked up for these adages but haven't found anything.
I hope you will fulfill me this wish. You're always asking for reviews. And I'm asking for a reply *thihihi*
Keep on writing - you're good. ^__~
Greets
Shiva

Let me first apologise for being stingy with the reviewing... I've been reading your story and enjoying it WAYYYYY too much. I LOVE your characterizations. No one is too sweet or too sentimental. I especially love your Schu... still a deranged lil monkey to the end. I prefer my Brad to NOT be a total ass but I sure didn't mind it here. You built Yohji and Schu's relationship so skillfully. I think all the little touches added so much depth to the story; feisty Aya-chan, playing tinker toys with fruity drinks at the beach bar, the preemptive innoculations - it all built a wonderfully detailed and easy to believe story. And the BradxSchu scene has to be one of my favorites... the 'gun ride' scene actually dropped my jaw, it was just soooo perfectly in character. Sorry, you have a fangirl. What's next, KDSarge-sama?

YAY! Yohji and Aya finally stopped being stupid and stubborn!!!! *does a happy dance* Now, not to be greedy...but I hope that isn't the end! Because...Schu and Brad...*whimper* They should have a happy ending too! Even though Crawford can be a bit of a prick....still though...*whimper*

I'm not trying to be mean and critical - you're story so far has been enjoyable - but in your story summary you labeled the pairing as Yohji/Aya, with Yohji as seme. Yet in this chapter you clearly have Aya being seme and Yohji bottoming. There are some readers who are specific in how they like their pairings and don't care to read sex scenes that are opposite their preference. So, unless you plan to have another lemon chapter somewhere in the story that has Yohji as seme to balance out the relationship, I suggest you change the summary of your story to reflect the accurate top & bottom so readers will be aware in advance and can make a better choice in whether to spend time reading the story or not.

while I like schu and crawford, can't say I like chap 16 too much. it was interesting, but I guess i probably need a second read to get into it or something. for some reason, a helpless crawford doesn't sit too well with me, but at least he's not too sentimental I guess.