rate_review Reviews

Super hottie Ranma . . . super hottie badass Ranmaa. . . me likes. Please write more, I like how the story is going so far and I want to see how the Old Crew will try (or not) to meld themselves back into his life.

OMG! Thank you for updating!!! Love the new chapter(s), much better format than the first few chapters. Will you be going back at some point to correct them or will you leave them as is. Hope to see more in the future and definitely encourage you to write!

Love your story! I've kept track of it for years and am overjoyed that you're updating it. Great characterizations and love how Ranma and Anita's bunch interact. Also, totally awesome how you paired Ranma and Asher.

Please, would love to see more in the future!

P.S.

Ignore Dhalim... Some people tear apart another person's story to make themselves feel more important.

Fanfiction is a great genre, you can do anything in its limitless capacity and has so much room for creativity. You can take any fandom and write about it, but there seems to be some small number that tend to be fandom lawyers. *you hear the sound of something being squashed like a cockroach*

One suggestion, though, please use punctuation. It lets us know what is dialogue, where a sentence ends, and helps pull a story together. Much better way to give criticism, don't you think?

Oh, dear God, use quotations! Also, you need to describe the character’s surroundings more- it seemed like characters kept appearing out of nowhere because you didn’t mention them before they started talking. On top of that, you have made the entire story about Ranma. I understand he’s the new character in a strange world, but that doesn’t mean life doesn’t go on for Anita and the rest of the characters. It would have been nice if you had gotten into her mind a bit. Not only that, but you basically gave Ranma Anita’s personality, deleted everything that made her uniquely Anita, and sent him off in her spot. All in all, the way any of the characters handled the situation wasn’t very realistic, and there are too many instances where this happens for me to point out all of them. I liked the concept, but the way the story was told didn’t really do it for me.

More I want more. This is a great story so far. I love no body recognizing Ranma and I can see Ashers face if they try to say that ranma is coming with them.

I really like your story please continue writing your chapters as soon as you can.

Intresting story - it looks like it's going to be a great fic but it feels like it's missing alot of details, between the prolouge and chapter one. Like how Ranma reacted to being bonded with Asher aka a MALE Vampire since throughout the series he's been purely hetrosexual, when did he regain his memories, how did the retuurning memories affect his relationship with asher, and how did he suddenly become so fluent in English in the second half of the prolouge when he could barely understand it a bit earlier. as well as questions like When did he start working for the RPIT and what exactly is his job is he just a translator or does he do other jobs? does he live at the circus? how comfortable is he with his female form? and where did he get the name Sakai from?
aiya i'm sorry i really didn't mean to ask so many questiongs but i'm really really curious. I hope you continue this story it's got a great potential and i'd love to read more.
Bally

thank you for finally continuing the story because I would love to read their reactions when the Nerima crew realize that was Ranma who got them out of jail.

that was good hope the rest comes soon