rate_review Reviews

Whoa. I've never read anything like this before... but I like it! Can't wait to read more!

As impressive as ever. You really put a lot of effort into your writing to hit the right emotions and develop the plot carefully. As always, intrigued and eager for more.

HI!, I was weary at first but I gave it a try and think you back ground and plot(her being there to make sure Serena is born) is great! and I can see those two even though I never would have thought of it.

I think you should continue it!

'blushes' People say I that about my other works too, I get too wrapped up in my story and i tned to ignore grammar, phrasing, and spelling then when I finish at chapter I am too hasty to double check it.
I am glad you like it and I promise to take some time to fix those errors before the weekend is out.
'bows' Thank you for reading.

First of all, do NOT change the pace. It's lovely and engaging. I'd read 50 chapters of this fic if need be, because the idea and style (so far) deserve that much attention. Secondly, I notice this chapter took a little longer...but that it also, in comparison to things I've seen you write, had a lot less small errors in phrasing, grammar, and spelling. That's very good, because honestly, thus far your only weakness as a writer that I've noticed is that your works seem hasty--your style, which SHOULD be pretty great, suffers from many small, but distracting errors. Would you want a proofreader, I wonder?

Criticism done, this is progressing very well and interestingly! I do have to ask, though--why do you refer to it as AU? I mean, it doesn't seem to me thus far that it would have to be AU...and it's not like Setsuna would speak about it in the series if it were going on, so you don't have to worry on that account. So, all in all, very well-conceived thus far, and looking forward to the next chapter! You have a definite talent for romantic ambiance and development.

wow original pair...plz continue it looks good

Well I'm impressed! This sounds like it's really going to be something great...I'm amazed that you're going to try to make such a deep love story out of such a crazy, if kinda neat, idea! Thank you so much for doing this, it's looking like it'll be really great and a fun read! And wow you can write a chapter quick.