rate_review Reviews

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

Some flamers don't learn... this story was done with imagination. Though you should have put Usa's age in the info, everything else seems just right.

Very well done, a change from those fan fic writers now of days who don't even try to make things fun, imagitive, or sexy. ^_~

I did enjoy :) the reasoning still didn't do it for me but I took it for what it was and it was hot in it's own way, good job in my opinion. Now as I usually do I read your reviews first to see if I wanted to read the story, and you Anon person is just nit picking and personally YOU can do WHAT ever you want since it's YOUR story, I mix the culture of the anime and my own culture in my stories however and whenever I like. Don't let stupid petty rants discourage you from writing. LOL, They are probably the same people who told me they didn't like a fic of mine because it's a crossover and for one of the anime's I use Japan names and for the other anime I use american dubbed names LMAO

PEople are just mean and jealous and I think if they didn't like the subject matter they should not have read. Your story is not perfect....but whose is? Over all I thought you did very good and keep writing, various subjects and anything that comes into your head. You can only learn and get better by writing more and more and trying your hand at different types of stories.

What hostility? I'm not coming in screaming about how incest is wrong and sick after completely ignoring the summary like a total idiot. I don't see anything especially wrong with the story itself. I mean it's sorta uninspired and pointless, but that's usually how 99 percent of lemons go. The action is pretty fine and it at least looks like you don't sleep through your Japanese classes. All I'm doing is pointing out that it's retarded to use foreign words that you clearly don't even really understand in a fanfic whose audience is clearly English. If someone made a fanfic and randomly and repeatedly threw in 7 misused Russian words, you'd wonder why in the world they'd do it because it just looks dumb. Same here. Forget where the show is from, think of where you are writing it for.

I meant English classes in that last review.

Well, I thank you for your honesty. I thought I was using the words in their correct manor but apparantly I wasn't. Thanks for pointing it out at least.

There was another incest story on this site. It was actually well-written. Yours is fine, but needs work. I beg you, please, please for the love of god get an editior! Do not get me wrong, its a good story, but I am a total nazi when it comes to proper use of grammar and spelling.
Also may I remind you that this is an adult site, so you are free to do what you wish. If writing an incest story floats your boat, then do so. I do not know why people create a sink about this. You will get flames, that is a given. But do not let it discourge you. Even famous writers such as S. King get shit about what they write.
Best,
Darkengineer

PS: GET AN EDITOR! Sorry, just being an asshole

Lacing mispelled and misused Japanese words in all you write is FUN! Because clearly the cultural differences between Konnichiwa and Hello are so extreme, you couldn't possibly convey the true meaning of your words in a language that a non retarded-fangirl reader would understand!

I guess flames are always welcomed and sorry if I can't speak the language. I do try my very best though.

If you can't speak the language, maybe you shouldn't be using it when you're writing a story in English. Since there's absolutely no point to doing that in the first place anyway other than to show off your marvelous fangirl cultural knowledge of no less than half a dozen over-used Japanese words.