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September 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMFG!! You can´t leave this story unfinished TuT Pleeeeeeeeeeeeese! Don´t be mean TTuTT I really really liked it..
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July 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i just found this fanfic but i think that it is really good so far. i do hope that you will continue with it soon. for english being your second language, you are an exceptionally good writer; better than a lot of people who were taught english FIRST!!!
the only form of constructive criticism i can think up is your tense. very rarely you will make this mistake, but you have had a tendency of changing your tense to past/present or vice versa. i may review a second time to go back and find examples of this for you.
other than that, fantastic fanfic. original and i LOVE it so far! if you would like to contact me, my email is angelicdevilryoko_16@hotmail.com
the only form of constructive criticism i can think up is your tense. very rarely you will make this mistake, but you have had a tendency of changing your tense to past/present or vice versa. i may review a second time to go back and find examples of this for you.
other than that, fantastic fanfic. original and i LOVE it so far! if you would like to contact me, my email is angelicdevilryoko_16@hotmail.com
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July 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Why haven't you updated yet? We need to find out if Hyoga will hate Shun or not. I'm begging you*gets down on knees*
please update soon.
please update soon.
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July 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*0* wow that was excellent! the best lemon I ever read!! please you have to continuee X)
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June 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh my God! I swear on my grandmother's grave, that that was the best lemon I 've ever read! And I'm not just sayin' that.seriosly! Please update soon because I want to find out how Hyoga will react when he finds out that he did the dirty deed with Shun.Heeheehee.I have never read a story like this before and I really,really like this story.
Please update soon!!!!!!!
Please update soon!!!!!!!
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May 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Fantasticly written. Great work! I\'m looking forward to the next part.