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Oh the plot thickens. So why is Tomah uping the anti? Can't wait to find out. Hope to read more soon.

Hello,

I'm just going to start of with saying, I refuse to finish reading this. Although I know everyone makes mistakes, if a writer expects reviews and praise, then they need to work for it. You need to either proof read your chapters and fix spelling and grammical error, or get yourself a beta. I pray to God you at least know what that is.

Also, this was too rushed. It was confusing and unclear, which is a shame becuase there's nothing wrong with the plot just the details, or lack there of. Don't be afraid to detail things and give them depth. After I finished with the last chapter, my mouth felt literally dry. Your portrayel of the characters was terrible.

Go back, rewrite the story or get a beta to fix the what you ahve so far, and your up coming one. A badly written story keeps the readers at bay and the reviewers away.

You'll be surprised at the differance in the number of readers/reviews.

Cheers
Crmy

Does he go? Come on you cant do this to meeeee!!!!!!

This is interesting. I'm looking forward to the next update.

Wow I like this story! Its really good, cant wait to see what comes next =^_^=

that\'s a cute story... (okay, I may have a strange sense of cuteness...) i\'m waiting for more!^^