rate_review Reviews

While I find this to be an enjoyable fiction, I think it could have been much better with a bit of variety in the descriptions. I kept finding too many of the same words following one upon another that it seemed almost unexciting through repetiveness. I think that a good thesaurus/dictionary would help this fiction greatly. Other than a few grammatical errors, your diction was very well done.


Please, do not take this as a flame. I liked it very much and would like to see more from you as you continue to grow into an excellent writer. This story was sound and flowed smoothly, which are often very hard to achieve. You handled it extremely well. Please continue to write and ask for help anytime you\'d like some advice, beta readers would be happy to help, as would I at any time. :)

OMFG!!!!! You know I love this ficcie....

*huggles a wet injured Sanzo*

I\'ll protect you Sanzie...

*huggles a wet tired Hakkai*

I\'ll protect you too my Hakkai....

Great ficcie and where the hell did the nickname Sanzie come from???

*leaves the room confused-mumbling the name Sanzie*