rate_review Reviews

very intresting story update soon please

I'm enjoying it thoroughly. While a lot of people balk at the idea of an OC, I actually enjoy it very much. Something that might help you out is a little hceck list for OC's. Give them a few quirks, a few flaws, and one REALLY good point. For isntance, your chacter's main flaw that I can see is that she is not strong enough to control a warewolf. Let's look at Integra! She controls Alucard not because she is stronger than him, but because he CHOOSES to give that power to her in return for waking him from his slumber.

It seems to me that Vicious (Don't we all love a handsome wolf?) would be a wonderful servant and loyal if he had a reason to be. Although our dear Integra is cold to Alucard eighty percent of the time, the other twenty, she is open like a book to him, and she is this way selflessly. Being a wolf as well, he will have incredibly strong instincts to be an alpha, so you might want to throw in some description of what he smells, what it does to him...what he hears, what affects his emotions.

Basically, it needs some character development. Although, I have to admit, I'm enjoying this BUNCHES!!!

Looking forward to your next update. I might even make you a fanart of Vicious... That would be sweet, eh? Toodles!