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Hi, remember me?? Finally see the new chapter and love it!!
I like Version 2 better, cos I like L too much to see him too occ...

Watch the second part of the Death Note movie today and it was very good, better than the first part.

So, Hello again.

I am hopeless sucker for happy stories and if you continue this one eventually it will end up very badly ( if you, indeed, follow the manga ), am I wrong? So, in my opinion you should either end the story now and avoid having a horribly sad ending, or, continue and change the plot so that ( you know who, I'm trying not to spoil anyone here ) does not die and they lived happily ( with lots of sex ) forever. *smirks*

Stay well again!

Hmm I like v 2.

well the real name of L is L. Lawliet thats why its L instead of R

Hello again.

After re-reading your fanfic I come to think that my first review was rather confusing since I put the two fourth chapters at the same level. Let me elaborate then:

I found the first version extremely good just like the second, although, as I mentioned before, the sex scene seems better on the first but that's only my personal opinion and you shouldn't care for that.

Beside that, Ryuuzaki seems slightly out of character on the first version, not to mention that I found your whole "Ryuuzaki wasn’t trying to kill himself; he was apparently trying to eat his hand" hilarious. I've suffered from Onychophagia ( bitting one's nails and/or toenails ) all my life and I even had to go to surgery once because I bit one of the nails too much and it got infected under the nail itself, meaning the nail had to be removed. What I mean is that, even suffering from this as seriously as I do, I doubt anyone would bite it's hand skin/nails enought to drain more than a single drop of blood from the wounds. Of course it can hurt badly sometimes, but the blood was exagerated, even if we are talking of Ryuuzaki and his autistic behaviour.

I agree with anyone who says you should now separate your story into two plots, one leaning more towards Raito and the other towards Ryuuzaki. It would be interesting to watch the development of the story throughtout two pathes.

Stay well!

I liked part 2 of chapter 4 best. But everything is very good and well written. Another nice part in the story is when Light is telling himself that he isn't Kira and L hugs him to make him feel better. A very good story and thank you for sharing.

Love othe versions, can't really choose which one is the best^^

Good fanfiction, I've been following it from the first chapter although I'm usually too lazy to reply :P
About this last 'double' chapter, I'm not sure which I like the best. The first version is much hotter than the other, but I hate to see Ryuuzaki so distressed and angst as that. The second is softer and still hot...

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Hey ^_^
First of all, I love this story. looooooove it. ^^ and your pic on deviantart is adorable btw :)
as for whoch version of the last chapter I like better, I'd have to go with the second. Riyuzaki is more in character. theyre both great though ^^

Finally an update! Love this story!