rate_review Reviews

Yes there are grammar mistakes. Quite a few unfortunately. It is a pleasant idea though, I hope you'll take the time to tidy it up a bit.

I like it but one thing I thik your should change is that you dont have to use there names that much. it started to bug me, but other then that like I said I realy liked it.

a great beginning. good characterization, keeping with the show. you have created tension, and a heaviness to the mood, a sadness to the tone. i love the way it ended. the piece could stand alone, although i would like to see the scene come to fruition and completion.

the grammar is not bad, although it seems like english is not your first or native language. some of the phrasing is awkward, but not horrible or confusing. i actually liked some of it; it has a stiffness to it that worked well with the tension of the piece.

thank you for writing and posting.

Hmmm, well, I found that some of the sentences didn't make sense because of the way you worded them. And the word 'grapped', don't you mean 'grabbed'? XD

i feel so bad for Okita!! damn his sickness!! this story is so good i loved it!!!