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by artemisgirl

person Carola-chan
schedule November 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wahahaah!
That was so funny! The 'Lauren' part had me laughing out loud! XD
They say a lot of speech can make things dull... Well, this certainly wasn't! *laughs* Truly great! X3
Also, thanks for reviewing my RaitoxL smut! Yeah... Showersex is the best... *drools*

Keep up the good work!
person Chys
schedule November 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
LOL! That was funny.
person elict
schedule November 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ah, lol! L is evil, i tell yoou, evil! ...and that's what i love so much about him. that and that he's incredibly sexy ^^ even Light can't deny that, which is obvious in this fic. thank you!
person teacupprincess14
schedule October 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hah hah! genderbendy L. gotta love it <3 nice work
person l
schedule October 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
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person saeki
schedule October 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Awwww This's LOVEABLE!!
I like the way you write it. How cute!!
person kitkat
schedule October 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ahahahahahaha yay smex.
person Hasu
schedule September 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is great! I just love how L plays with Raito [did I spell that right?] He's very convincing isn't he? Great work. >^__^<
person Anon
schedule September 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
haha that was great. more please!
person Lodrelhai
schedule September 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is a damn good piece. I love, absolutely, love, the mindgame, and I can see L doing exactly that! Shame on Light for making assumptions! At least he got over it quickly.

Gramatical suggestion - careful of adverb overuse and run-on sentences. The first sentence in this could easily have been two, maybe even three. I almost stopped reading right there, which would have been a real shame. This is too good a story to have that kind of first impression!

Great job again!

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