schedule
September 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
...nice story but you should really try to put some spaces between "paragraphs"
It is
REALLY hard to read.
Otherwise..good job!
schedule
September 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Now I am not saying I am a perfect writer either but, I have to agree this story is pretty hard to fallow. I am sure you had good thoughts and tried hard its just Its hard to fallow. When you say Pan do you mean Penis? Or Pants? I was just wondering otherwise keep on writing!