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YAY~! A new chapter. So happy! Can't wait to see the next one soon!

Wow. great update.
It was well worth the wait...
I love this fic still and it's the best POT fic I have read
and since I started reading this I have
read about 40 others...

It's truly great and I'm already waiting for the next update.

Good luck on the next chapter...

Huggles Enzeru

Want to scream, is right! But I don;t want to kill you. Then I'd never find out what happens... *grumble grumble*

Honestly, take your time. As an author, I know it's best not to force your writing or it goes awry, and I'd rather read something well thought out than rushed. ^.^ That said... *rotfl* I loved Eiji and Momo's solution to the hidden tea set.

I am surprised neither Inui or Fuji volunteered to open the puzzle box, though. Seems like it would be right up their alley. Unles,, fo course, in Inui's case, it just 'wasn't logical'. :p

Good chapter. I'm looking forwad to more.

I Love your fic, Please E-mail me when you next update! (The Taka-Akutsu pairing was a surprise!)
Merry Christmas!

Jar-Na

This is soooo good....
Such mystery you have here is amazing.
This is the second POT Fic I've read. I begun yesterday,
I never thought of reading them before.
But I'm stunned by the quality and the well made history of this fic.
You would definately be able to write mystery books.
I swear I'm slightly afraid to turn off my lights now while going to bed...
And that in my opinion is a very good sign.

Keep up the good work and good luck on your next chapter.

//Enzeru

waaa... this is such a cute story XD i was squeeing all the way through 11 chapters ^___^ i like how you put the twists in the right places, i like the ghosts even the evil one because you made him so believeable :) as for the question of whether you've made ryoma wimpy or not, well... i like this softer side of ryoma :) and i'm glad you didn't make momo as the bad guy... he's such a brave boy... make him date an-chan? hehehe

don't worry, at least you posted!

Glad to see another chapter up so soon! [For me, at least. :P] Can't wait to see what happens next. Poor Ryouma the first...

^.^ Not bad at all for a first lemon. Especially seeing as it was a threesome.

Honestly, though, I'd stay away from using the word 'butt' in a lemon. Maybe it's just me but I tend ot giggle insanely when I see that word used in a lemon.

Aaanyway. As for the rest of the story, I'm really enjoying it. I love the three ghost characters, and the two stories we've been given so far are really touching. I'm glad to see Kaidoh and Inui getting together, as well. Oh, and Momo. Kamio is exactly the person I would have suggested aside from Kawamura.

^.^ I hope we'll get to see a little more of Eiji and Oishi.

I really think you've done a good job with the plot. It's not often one comes across fanfiction with an actual plot that doesn't solely revolve around relationships. [My own included. >.<]

The only criticism I have is that sometimes the dialogue is a bit uncomfortable to the point where I cringe and feel embarassed for the people speaking. There's a trick to dialogue. It can get awkward or OOC really easily. I would suggest working on this, maybe reading some well written fanfiction, or even books and thinking about whether or not you can imagine someone saying that in real life.

That said, please don't be offended. I offer criticism because I think it's worth the effort to do so, so take it as a compliment.

I hope to see more of this story soon. I'm dying to know just what happened in the tea room.

[I can't quite go back and check just now, but I seem to remember mention of the original Ryouma dying when he was a baby, yet his ghost is 16... Maybe I'm just tired. It IS 5:00am.]

Thanks and good luck!

Krystal Epyon@yahoo.com

Ohhhh...
very well for your first lemon!
If that damned ghost wasn't dead already I'll be claiming for his head!
Can you kill a ghost? I wonder...