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November 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm glad to see I'm not the only one writing for this fandom!
Anyway, I really liked this story, up until the 'it was a dream' part. I would've liked to have seen the sex scene incorporated into the real world. But that's just me.
I also think you could probably benefit from the use of a good beta reader - there were a bunch of tiny little mistakes that could've been avoided with the use of a good proofreader.
But I do hope you write more Wedding Peach! Keep up the good work!
Anyway, I really liked this story, up until the 'it was a dream' part. I would've liked to have seen the sex scene incorporated into the real world. But that's just me.
I also think you could probably benefit from the use of a good beta reader - there were a bunch of tiny little mistakes that could've been avoided with the use of a good proofreader.
But I do hope you write more Wedding Peach! Keep up the good work!