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September 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
So I just read the whole thing in one. Amazing. I thought Mamoru/Darien/Endymion being Galaxia's son was an odd twist, although a well written and well used one! And definitely not one I've seen used before.
Beautifully done. *applause* The summary made me laugh out loud... and then the writing kept me reading all 27 chapters straight. Loved it.
Beautifully done. *applause* The summary made me laugh out loud... and then the writing kept me reading all 27 chapters straight. Loved it.
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September 7, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I'm through Chapter 5 and had to drop you a review.
First the bad: your writing has definite potential, but it's riddled with spelling and grammatical errors Also, you shift perspectives midway through scenes and it makes the prose kind of awkward. The dialogue is fun, but a little juvenile (though I admit that this may have been intentional).
Now the good: Your ideas are fun and new and the plot is intriguing. I think you've got a good grip on how to write characters and develop stories, which is something that can't be taught. With a solid revision, this could go from being good to great.
First the bad: your writing has definite potential, but it's riddled with spelling and grammatical errors Also, you shift perspectives midway through scenes and it makes the prose kind of awkward. The dialogue is fun, but a little juvenile (though I admit that this may have been intentional).
Now the good: Your ideas are fun and new and the plot is intriguing. I think you've got a good grip on how to write characters and develop stories, which is something that can't be taught. With a solid revision, this could go from being good to great.
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March 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I read the first few chapters and found some things I like. I want to applaud you on an original idea! That is the most important thing that I look for in a fanfic. The reasoning for her needing to have sex and the predicument the galaxy is in is sound. I encourage you to continue to be creative and I'm also glad you kept going until you finished the story!
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January 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
One of the best stories I read in a long time. Can't wait for more. Hope you update soon. I just happened to find it today and read all the chapters. I haven't read sailor moon fiv in years and I've been rewatching all the episodes. So I aid let me go find something that would give me juicier darien/serena action and I'm so glad I found this story. Keep up the good work.
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January 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hola!
Primero escribire esto en español, ya qu ele ingles pues no se me da mucho, pues que cuento, lei todos los capitulos, y estoy muy emocionada, de verdad tiene una buena trama ademass del lado lemon, espero tengas oportunidad de actualizar pronto, saludos desde mexico.
Hi, im from mexico, and i write awful in english, i just try, i like tyour history a lot, its intersting knowing more about senshis, Its great, , now i wanna know what its happen know, that endy have the brazalet, its bad again??? serena learn quickly t use her powers, please, i hope you can write another chpater , and end with my angs,,
thank u :)
Primero escribire esto en español, ya qu ele ingles pues no se me da mucho, pues que cuento, lei todos los capitulos, y estoy muy emocionada, de verdad tiene una buena trama ademass del lado lemon, espero tengas oportunidad de actualizar pronto, saludos desde mexico.
Hi, im from mexico, and i write awful in english, i just try, i like tyour history a lot, its intersting knowing more about senshis, Its great, , now i wanna know what its happen know, that endy have the brazalet, its bad again??? serena learn quickly t use her powers, please, i hope you can write another chpater , and end with my angs,,
thank u :)
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December 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
AHHHH I skipped class to read this and now I need more. ...................
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December 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Master, enlighten us with your wisdom! *worships*
Seriously, you're a wonderful writer! Yesterday I found your fanfic and was so caught up in the story that I read it non-stop until 5a.m. of today! It's one of the best stories I've ever read, and as a writer myself, I don't have enough words to say how good is it, and I worship you.
Pleeeeaseee, I understand that the writer block sucks, and that you have a life outside of this, but could you write more soon? I want to know what happens! Please? Pretty please with sugar on top?
I'll give you a cookie!
Seriously, you're a wonderful writer! Yesterday I found your fanfic and was so caught up in the story that I read it non-stop until 5a.m. of today! It's one of the best stories I've ever read, and as a writer myself, I don't have enough words to say how good is it, and I worship you.
Pleeeeaseee, I understand that the writer block sucks, and that you have a life outside of this, but could you write more soon? I want to know what happens! Please? Pretty please with sugar on top?
I'll give you a cookie!
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November 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
you so have to continue this story!!!! please?
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September 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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August 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
cool chapter... a long time coming but worth the wait =D